User talk:Oliver Barge/Scottish Highlander

Oliver: I made a copy of your page and put it into User:Gloverepp/test. I then modified it to fit my own personal style - not better or worse, just personal. GloverEpp ( talk ) 19:46, 23 September 2009 (UTC)

Oliver: I'm back home after a quick trip to visit my mother in Louisiana. Rather than me making changes, I'll just make some suggestions.
 * You need to have a lead paragraph. What I suggest is to remove the ==History== tag.  What this will do is put the first two paragraphs above the contents box.  I guarantee that the editors will mark the page as not having a Lead_paragraph if you don't.
 * The link to Glencoe does not go where it should. It leads to an ambiguous page.  You need to better define the link.
 * Don't forget about the link to the deck plans.
 * When did European Waterways buy the ship? Or is this owned by someone else?
 * This barge is a luxe motor just like the Anjodi, look to see how I handled that for the Anjodi.
 * Mention crew of four, captain, chef, etc.

Did you get any more books for references? all my best... GloverEpp ( talk ) 23:38, 22 September 2009 (UTC)