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Young Identity (YI) was formed in Moss Side, Manchester in 2006. It is a large group of young writers, actors, musicians and visual artists led by Shirley May and   Ali Gadema (the co-ordinators). Young Identity has at its core a Poetry Slam team. This team represented Manchester in the Apples & Snakes Word Cup Slam Championship 2006, Brave New Voices Poetry Festival 2008 (Washington, D.C. USA) & Brave New Voices International Slam Poetry Festival 2009 (Chicago, USA).

Shirley May
Shirley is a published poet and spoken word artist, published in numerous anthologies, including The Suitcase Book of Love Poems (Suitcase Press, 2008) and Hair (Suitcase Press, 2006). She has worked in performing arts for many years and has a wide range of project management experience in creative arts and community projects. She is the co-founder, with Ali Gadema, of Young Identity, Shirley May is a winner of the North West Poetry Slam and has performed at venues across the North West, including The Pankhurst Centre, Yard Theatre, and the Contact Theatre. As a poet and facilitator she has worked regularly in schools and Young Offender institutions.

Ali Gadema
Ali has been immersed in the world of rap, poetry, hip hop theatre, and education nationally for many years. Under the alias (Pseudonym) of Frisko Dan he founded Freestyle Mondays, a night of improvised lyricism and beatbox at the Contact Theatre. He has written and performed a solo show Contradictions and co-founded the Pen-ultimate poetry collective.

Sub Groups
Young identity members have, over the years, moved out from under Young Identity, to form their own sub groups within Young Identity. Young Identity's Inna Voice, A Manchester-based collective of poets, MC's, singers, beatboxers, producers and visual artists. the brain child of Young Identity.

Mission Statement
Young Identity is a community-based writing project for young people. which encourages literacy, critical thinking and active citizenship. Young Identity work and perform locally, nationally, and internationally providing young people with a platform to explore their expression. Young Identity's vision is to engage and empower the next generation of young writer and performers.

Notable Performances
One Mic Stand at the Contact Theatre. November 2012, March 2013.

Mirrors at the Contact Theatre. October, 2013.

Opened for Amiri Baraka during the Manchester Literature Festival. at the Contact Theatre. October 2012.

Opened for Kate Tempest at the Contact Theatre. February 2014.

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Young Identity (May 22)
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Your submission at Articles for creation: Young Identity (May 22)
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Your submission at Articles for creation: Draft:Young Identity
Thank you for your submission to Articles for Creation.

The changes you made since it was declined in May 2014 don't address the points JustBerry raised. I did some cleanup to get the article closer, but it still needs work, or it's likely to be declined again.

Having a Mission statement section screams advertisement, public relations, and self-promotion. Merge that content into the lead. "Young Identity (YI) is a community-based writing project for young people, which encourages literacy, critical thinking and active citizenship." would be a much better first sentence than "Young Identity (YI) was formed in Moss Side, Manchester in 2006." The very first thing readers want to know is, "What is this?"

It's good to mention Manchester in the lead (also specify England, Wikipedia readership is global). The neighborhood within Manchester, year of founding, and first mention of May and Gadema could probably be moved down and made into introductory text in the Founders section.

It's good to have the lines about the poetry slam team in the lead because the team is a core part of YI and it's concrete, unlike say, "a platform to explore their expression." The lead is a high-level summary of the rest of the article, though, so the poetry slam team and those three events should be mentioned again in the body, presumably somewhere in Notable performances.

Many paragraphs are close paraphrases of the sources, which isn't allowed. You can solve that by rewriting them in your own words.

The wording from one source to another is sometimes identical or nearly so, which is another problem. That shows that the sources aren't independent of each other, and possibly not independent of the subject. The biographical blurbs and capsule descriptions of YI may have originated with YI, its members, or sources closely associated with it. It's okay to use that material, but the majority of an article is supposed to be from independent sources.

To establish notability you also have to show that YI has attracted the notice of reliable sources unrelated to the organization. Your best sources for that are two from The Public Reviews. Wikipedia approvers are looking for whether the organization has had any significant or demonstrable effects on culture, society, entertainment, economies, literature, education, etc. Are there any reviews of the poetry slam team's performances? Can you point to any flop that was turned into a hit thanks to the YI writing workshops? Anything like that would bolster the claim of notability.

Finally, you are allowed to use dead links as references, but consider whether you really need the two you have. Are the statements important to the topic, YI? Can other references adequately support the statements? Worldbruce (talk) 01:01, 24 August 2014 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Young Identity (September 11)
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Fiddle  Faddle  13:10, 11 September 2014 (UTC)

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