User talk:Oliviagower3/sandbox

Julia's Peer Review
Your article on Sonia Harmand is really well done so far. The information you include about the Lomekwi 3 stone tools is informative and well-written. The section about the Acheulean Tools is also very interesting.

I clicked the link to Harmand’s name, and I saw that there is a short intro/ lead already published. However, I think you should include additional information about her findings within the introduction. While the current, published article informs us about what Harmand studies and where she went to school/ works, the majority of your sandbox discusses her findings such as the Lomekwi and Acheulean tools. Since the introduction is meant to provide a clear idea of what is contained further within the article, it should mention the topics you later focus on.

The early life and education section could be further developed with information about her early life. Currently, you only mention where she received her PhD. Did Harmand study undergraduate somewhere else? Additionally, what information about her early life can be provided? Perhaps if you contact Harmand, she might provide information about what sparked her interest in archaeology, how her upbringing impacted her interests, or if she participated in any projects when she was younger/ a student/ less well-known. Finally, what did her dissertation cover. What research did she complete in order to earn her PhD?

As I mentioned, I think the Lomekwi 3 Stone Tools section is well done. I like the mentioning of stone tool knapping being associated with Homo and how Harmand’s findings led to new observations and conclusions. The addition of a table with information about the Australopithecines you list might help inform readers what non-homo characteristics are. The inclusion of images of specific stone tools found by Harmand would also be beneficial for the article.

There should be more information about the Acheulean Tools. This section seems to disappear next to all the information on the Lomekwi tools, but they are so important because of the conclusions made.

Finally, is there any research that Harmand is currently working on that could be included at the end of the article? It might be interesting for readers to know where her past research has taken her today.

Overall, great job! Your sandbox is informative, well-written and nicely organized! It also does not seem bias towards anything in particular, so good job being neutral. I’m excited to see where it goes!

--Juliagurr (talk) 21:19, 2 November 2018 (UTC)