User talk:Omardiggydawg/sandbox

Omar: Hey there! I am the designated spokesperson, this is the user page of my sandbox and I think this is what we'll use to cooperate.

"Rhita.zerhouni" Alright so as we said earlier we are editing the grammar and punctuation and adding the a "popular culture" paragraph. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rhita.zerhouni (talk • contribs) 05:09, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Omar: Yes that is right. For now, try to do a little research about the golden retriever's symbolism in media and popular culture. If you find anything, let me know here.

Rhita.zerhouni:Ok so although this article 's main purpose is to promote a specific brand of vitamins for dogs, it contains some information about the Golden retriever we can use : http://www.vitaminsforpitbulls.com/golden_retriever_health_puppy.html , What do you think ? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rhita.zerhouni (talk • contribs) 18:20, 23 March 2012 (UTC)

Omar: Thats a good start, but this article gives general information about the GR. We need to focus on on their symbolism in popular culture. It stated in that article how recognizable GRs are beacuse of its popularity and frequent appearences in media. Thats what we need; but we need more.

Ali: hey Omar, this is better! Ok dont forget guys just research about Golden Retrievers in popular culture. we should all post our refrences and a brief summary about what we took from that. For example: A paragraph that talks about a list of movies that golden retrievers have been in.

Omar: Cool, I got it! Now try to post something on the Talk page of my sandbox because it is where we'll discuss things.

"Ali " :Hey everyone, just a reminder to all the members of what we are going to try to do: We are going to search for golden retrievers in popular culture, There are a few lines about it on the official golden retriever page but I think we can write more on the appearance of this species of dog in media in general. The German shepherd page has a complete paragraph on the specie's appearance in popular culture, so I think we can follow their footsteps on how to approach in writing the equivalent for the Golden retriever.

Ali I found a good one, Life Is Good: Lessons in Joyful Living is a book written by Trixie and Dean Kootz. Trixie Koontz is a dog with a famous last name. She is a retired assistance dog for CCI. "This is her first book. She lives with Dean and Gerda Koontz in southern CA, and all her shots are up to date" (http://www.powells.com/biblio/7-9780972942775-2). Trixie is a golden retriever who inspired her author to write a book about the life of his dog and how simple happiness can be achieved by a dog. Furthermore,"Trixie wrote Life is Good to support her friends who are service dogs for people with disabilities. She is donating her royalties to Canine Companions for Independence (CCI), the national organization that breeds and trains assistance dogs for adults and children with disabilities"(http://www.powells.com/biblio/7-9780972942775-2). - The next step is to write about the Air bus series and maybe how popular the golden retrievers became because of the success of the series in personifying how family friendly the species of the dog is. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ali.khalid7 (talk • contribs) 00:38, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Ali This is a great site with a list on the most recognized golden retrievers: http://landofpuregold.com/famous.htm — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ali.khalid7 (talk • contribs) 00:42, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Omar: Great! Ali can you post these things in the talk page of my sandbox?

Ali There you go is that right? This is where you wanted me to post right? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 92.253.68.128 (talk) 19:27, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

Ali Hello everyone, I found this great site on Golden Retrievers in Commercials, it seems that golden retrievers are in many commercials especially during the super bowl. This site contains many of the commercials that golden retrievers were in, this is great for our edited paragraph as it shows the retriever not only in movies but also in commercials. The link: http://www.iheartgoldenretrievers.com/tag/superbowl-dog-commercials/ I also want to make sure that as we agreed I'm making most of the research leaving only the putting together of the information and citing them. Hope all is going well.

Chelcie.May: Here are the corrections I found that need to be made in the History section: (1st paragraph,second line) reword the sentence about having a dog that can retrieve from water and land was needed. In the next sentence erase the "so," and just start with "Early". Third line second paragraph "retrievals were found to be ineffective". 3rd paragraph, last line "games while on hunts". 4th paragraph 2nd line reword it to- "America, and in 1925 AKC did so". 5thP, 2ndL at the end erase comma after Canada.5thP, 3rdL after English Golden put a comma, and put a period after Northland Kennels, and erase the rest. Appearance:British type- 1stL after Golden retrievers put "that are", 2ndL after American lines put a semi colon and erase the "and". Line 8, put "the" in front of British Temperament: 3rd line erase "therefore", line 5 put a period after breed-and start new sentence with "As such this is ...". Health: 2nd line "minimize" is spelt wrong. Activities: line 7,after earthquakes place a comma and replace "or" with "and". Let me know if this is understandable and correct

"Rhita Zerhouni": Hey guys, so I condensed the writing of the introductory paragraph and made it easier for people to comprehend :

"The Golden Retriever is a medium-sized breed of dog. They have a dense inner coat that provides them with adequate warmth and a water repellent outer coat that lies flat against their body. Historically, they were developed as gundogs to retrieve shot waterfowl such as ducks and upland game birds during hunting and shooting parties.[1] The name retriever was given from their ability to retrieve game undamaged and have an instinctive love of water. The official color of the breed is the varying shades of gold that are most often seen.[2] These dogs are well suited to suburban or country environments. Although they need lots of outdoor exercise, they should be kept fenced in because of their instincts as hunting dogs.[3]

The Golden retriever’s intelligence gives them the ability to be versatile and play a variety of roles including guide dog for the blind, hearing dog for deaf people, hunting dog, illegal drug detector, and search and rescue participant. Because of their loyal and gentle temperament, golden retrievers are also popular family pets.[4] They possess a friendly, eager-to-please demeanor and are the fifth most popular family dog breed (by registration) in the United States,[5] the fifth most popular in Australia,[6] and the eighth most popular in the United Kingdom.[7]."

"'"Rhita Zerhouni"''': Ok this is not possible to do, we can't change the whole paragraph because of the numerous references and hyperlinks , Omar, let's just revise and proof-read the introductory part, like Chelcie did for the body parts and edit the "Activities" paragraph some more.

Omar": Ok Rhita''' and now let's create the "popular culture" paragraph using Ali's articles and include it.

Omar: Okay guys, we got the sufficient information and now, with Rhita I will edit the entire article and send the email to Mr Dick.