User talk:Omo2019/sandbox

Overall this article looks good and is coherent, neutral and readable. A main critique is the lack of images which could be added particularly in the step by step setup of the assay. Referring to the Wiki Peer Review Guidelines, the article is missing links to related WikiPages.

First section: This section is a general overview of the TEER assay. In this section, the sentences are long and there's a lot of information. Those with a biology background will likely be able to understand it but, those without science training will likely struggle because of the large amount of technical jargon (monolayer, kinetics, toxicant). That being said, it is a technical method so technical jargon is expected. Perhaps, linking these words to relevant WikiArticles will help. The step by step section at the end could use a photo description and be reformatted into a numbered list for accessibility.

Second section: This section compares the two known methods of the TEER assay. The first method would benefit from an equation with the inverse that is referenced. This would help to break up the words and jargon. Overall, this section has a lot of adverbs which could be removed to increase the succinctness of the article. The second method should be included which the author was unsure about but should explain what a frequency sweep is or linked to a wikipage that explains it.

Third section: This section goes into applications of the TEER assay. This section is very interesting but would benefit from a picture of organ-on-chip that could pull from the WikiCommons. It is filled with science-jargon which makes it dense and hard to understand at a glance. As for the description of the studies, including a short sentence that includes the generalized idea and finding of each paper would help readers understand where the past research that utilizes this technique is going.

ThereisnoplanetB (talk) 16:35, 18 November 2019 (UTC)