User talk:Onionpatch534/sandbox

Hello! To summarize what we discussed in class: it looks like the introduction paragraph could probably be broadened to provide a nice summary of the whole article, according to the training modules that we completed and using the featured articles that we found as models. Also, the training modules encouraged us to work paragraph by paragraph, rather than changing entire sections all at once, so that might be something to bear in mind when making changes. As Professor Kriesberg said - smaller, discrete changes are easier for others to follow down the road. Other than that, be bold and start putting your changes on the page itself! VLBT2468 (talk) 23:28, 24 October 2018 (UTC)