User talk:Ooneil/Women in government

Hi Alex! My edits will be italicized. To the people who are peer-reviewing me: I'll be finishing making all of my edits italicized this morning after my class. Let me know if anything is confusing. I'll keep checking this talk page now that I know how to use it haha :) -Olivia

Another note on my edits
Note: I've also separated each section I've edited with brackets. It'll look something like:

[Section currently titled "X"]

This is so that I only had to copy and paste sections I worked on. The current Wiki article is really long, so I wanted to keep the sandbox page as concise as possible!

Hi! I enjoyed reading your page and I think you mentioned a lot of great points. However, I would like to point out that it was difficult to distinguish your edits from the original article. Even with your notes I was still a bit confused as to which parts were yours. On the italicized text under the "Challenges faced by women in government" section, I think the sentence can be broken up or condensed more because it seems a bit wordy. I also wanted to mention that the sentences at the end of the "Personal life and choices" section seem too brief and may need a sentence or two in between for further explanation and to create a good transition. Great work so far on the page! ````Cyana James — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cjames2020 (talk • contribs) 07:49, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

I too am having an issue distinguishing your comments from the rest of the article. Are all of the italicized portions yours? Or are some of them original to the article? Ezia9 (talk) 20:21, 23 November 2020 (UTC) Elizabeth Zia

Responding to peer edits
All of the italicized portions in the article are my own words. None of the italicized portions are from the original article. I know you both likely won't see this now, but I appreciate your feedback regardless and will make this even more clear by switching to bolded text for the final edits. :) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ooneil (talk • contribs) 16:24, 2 December 2020 (UTC)