User talk:Ooyenus1/sandbox

I definitely think the topics you are trying to add will be a great contribution to the wikipedia page. Saying what's missing was a great way to get started on this. The sources are credible and seems to give information that you want to include into your wiki page. Now, I would suggest just going more in depth with each section and adding more detail. Overall, I think you're going in the right direction with this. Sapphire l (talk) 07:06, 31 March 2017 (UTC)

Draft Comments: Thoughts and suggestions
I really like the encyclopedic tone used throughout the article draft: very professional and concise when getting Adelaide-Nutting's biography across. One thing I would have to suggest about the sources listed at the bottom of the page is correctly applying references tags linked to them throughout the body of the article linked to a source (very minor but it could matter for reader clarity). Essentially, put tags wherever you might feel the draft directly relies upon a source for information.

The background section divider should just state "background" without the parentheses, and the sections about both Adelaide-Nutting's education and professional life before Hopkins could be expanded upon. Great draft so far! Scerpellare (talk) 01:58, 11 April 2017 (UTC)