User talk:Opeco1/sandbox

Peer Review by Mackenzie Conroy Neutrality: Everything that you wrote in your sandbox seems to be neutral. The only thing that I might be concerned about is that the source you used is all about art and may be a bit biased. I can't be so sure about that though, but I would maybe just look into some other articles that could potentially say the same thing. Format and Citation: The citation looks good. The only thing is that I am not sure what format we are supposed to use. So the only thing that I would check for is what format you should be using. I know on many of the wikipedia pages that I have visited the citations seem to be in MLA or APA format. Substance/Instructions: All of the edits that you plan to make seem substantial. Including sources where there weren't any before is always a good idea, this way you make the article credible and cited. Adding a more educated and informational sentence about propaganda will add to the article even more. Language: The language that you used in this article seems to be great. It does not use such large words that people may not understand but they are educational enough to where it does not sound bland.

Extra notes: The only other thing that I have to add is to maybe make another edit. I know the requirement is at least three. And from what I see in your sandbox I only see two important edits. Mconr1 (talk) 16:52, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Response to Peer Review
The citations are done through Wikipedia generated citation tool, therefore the only citation I can provide is the one that Wikipedia has generated for me with the information I have provided. For another edit, I can continue to observe the areas of Public Attitudes and Concerns, I can perhaps change the sentence structures or remove some unnecessary information, such as in the section of Institutions, I can remove the sentence "Outstanding books and magazines and individual collectors can wield considerable influence" considering there is no citation for the sentence, and the information within the sentence has no direct relation to Contemporary Art Institutions. I will continue to look at sources that may be less biased, however, the sources I have are considerably neutral. Opeco1 (talk) 17:07, 1 May 2018 (UTC)