User talk:OpticalWriter/articlesandbox

Avery's Peer Review
Great start on your article!

You did an excellent job narrowing down broad statements surrounding Georges' work to accommodate her multiple contributions to causes other than women's comics. If possible, I would look into linking other articles that discuss those other topics (i.e. veganism, queer identity, etc.) so readers who aren't familiar with those communities can get a bit of context.

Your in-text citations are beautiful. The only thing I would change is linking her personal website when mentioning it, or giving specifics on when you say "or others". Perhaps a screenshot of those websites may be useful here so the reader can easily access them if they are interested.

I was super impressed by your chronology and how well you distributed sparse information on Georges' page while still maintaining a balance, specifically regarding the renaming of headlines. Like my artist, your artist publishes a lot of her own work online and this gives me an ideas of how I should structure my article in a formal, reader-friendly way. I highly recommend you reach out to Georges if you wish to clarify her personal details while informing her of this project because who knows? That exchange could potentially serve as another source to support your edits. I am sure she would be flattered--this is an amazing improvement on the original page!

Averyyclements (talk) 19:23, 19 November 2018 (UTC)Averyyclements

Hanna's Peer Review
This looks great so far!

You definitely have a good start on the information you want to add to her page. It seems like you have already completed the groundwork for a strong page (i.e. fixing grammatical errors and citation adjustments). It was helpful for me to see what changes you've already made to see what I should be cautious of when creating my page. I also appreciate that you divided your sandbox into an "Already Completed" section and a "To Do" section. This simple format helped me understand what errors or additions to look for on Georges' page.

I think adding a "Critical Reception" would be beneficial. It seems like the previous section heading is unclear, and by adding this new section, you could not only improve the flow of the page but add some more detailed information as well.

My only suggestion for this page is to add a photo or two, perhaps of her most notable work cover. Seeing all of the changes and information you are going to add, I worry that the page could become very text heavy. Adding a few images could help visual learners, such as myself, flow through the page easier.

Overall, great work! I'm looking forward to seeing how the final version turns out! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hc-ratljost (talk • contribs) 22:40, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

Kaitlyn’s Peer Review
Finally found your sandbox with your edits for your female comic artist! It’s really well organized, I like how you indicated your edits by striking through the original work. That makes it easier to compare your contributions to the original. I also agree that the original information could be expanded upon and the flow improved. You might be able to work in her artistic style when desribing her actual comics, as long is it’s all fact based and impartial. Since she is a living artist it might be hard to include information about her personal life that she herself has not shared. You could reach out to her or just omit a personal life section all together. Push come to shove she could edit this page herself and either censor you or expand upon what you write. It’s looking great so far! (Fisher2019 (talk) 16:46, 28 November 2018 (UTC))