User talk:OrionAllgaier/sandbox

Particulate Pollution Peer Review
I really like the first paragraph outlining the different sized particles that are of interest. I like that you mention that is a global issue, but perhaps mention the setting (outdoor air quality, occupational, others?). I also like that acute exposure is discussed with the different types of outcomes. The last paragraph about the sources of particulate pollution sources is very relevant and touches on the many different areas the subject covers.

There are just a couple areas I think could use some elaboration. The last sentence in the first paragraph could be made a bit more clear, maybe just change the structure of the sentence.

The first sentence in the second paragraph states "exposure of these particulates.." which should specify the particles smaller than 10 micrometers (nanoparticles?). Also the last sentence in the second paragraph "older adults, children, pregnant... are at greater risk.." but of what? Diseases associated with small particulates? Types of specifically dangerous particles?

In the third paragraph, elaborate more on the standard like why was it lowered, and implications of lowering it. The 3rd and 4th paragraph could almost be combined because they both discuss the national ambient air quality standard. Also you could talk about TLVs in occupational settings if you want to add more content. I think some statistics or maybe a really big particulate pollution incident that occured in the United States could be added to show the relevance of the issue.

Side note, the citations just need to be added through the wiki link adding (which won't take long to do). Overall, the article is a good outline of the large concepts in particulate pollution. It is a bit dry and could use some more stats, relevant studies and overall details to show the prevalence of the problem.

Peer Review
The content is good, I think you provided neutral, credible information.

just a few notes:

"Older adults, children, pregnant, and immunocompromised populations are at greater risk" At risk for what? Inhaling? Disease?

Most of the information is describing what the particulate matter is, not necessarily the epidemiology of it. Maybe try to find studies or stats on exposure.

Overall great draft! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Giorgian6758 (talk • contribs) 18:55, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Overall, it's great quality of information explaining particle pollution but it doesn't really any epidemiological information with it! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ktincher (talk • contribs) 02:27, 27 November 2018 (UTC)