User talk:Ozayr2001/Moken/Ozayr2001 Peer Review

I think the article has a strong foundation and a solid amount of content within it but it would be a lot better if the sections on underwater vision and government control were rewritten. There are a couple of smaller tweaks that I outlined in the peer review but the quality of the article would substantially be improved if those parts were fixed. Great job on gathering the information!

Assignment
I've copied the peer review over to User:Briannaanewton/Ozayr2001_Peer_Review so that the student can benefit from your review. Chuck Haberl (talk) 16:59, 15 April 2021 (UTC)