User talk:PBP7

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Hello, PBP7, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Adequately updated to reflect changes. A little top heavy with the statistics but less detail following; could be trimmed or expanded to better balance that.

Sections: Make sense and have a good order per recommended Wikimed style.

Balance: The content and amount of information for each section make sense and are well balanced based on their importance. Cultural Significance could be expanded since it's really just the input of one article and overall is not very neutral, especially the last paragraph as it has no source. But that one is difficult to keep neutral.

Neutrality: Overall neutral tone, with more focus on negatives/critical of alcohol but that is difficult to avoid given the topic.

Sources: There's still multiple "citation needed" in the article that should be addressed.Most sources are good and varied. This link does not work and stood out as possible lower quality since it's just a news report and not a research article ""Early Age At First Drink May Modify Tween/Teen Risk For Alcohol Dependence". Medical News Today. 21 September 2009. Archived from the original on 13 February 2010."

Overall very good article! 12Birds (talk) 18:21, 12 November 2023 (UTC)