User talk:Paig5/sandbox

=Rouen Evaluations=

4/24/2019 Evaluation by Afackrell
Afackrell (talk) 07:37, 24 April 2019 (EST)
 * Points: 36.5
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Standard? You use past tense for the cathedral which is still standing. Not sure if you mean to do this referring to the old building and restorations but I believe “Rouen Cathedral ‘WAS’ a large and complex building that ‘WAS’ the product of” should be replaced with “is”. There are a couple of other places similar throughout the writing. I believe there is also a random “10” after “Roulland le Roux” and quotation marks after “stylistic modes”. The second section has random numbers and punctuation as well and is missing spaces and the T in “the”. This could have been imputed into some sort of spell check before being reviewed...

Language
Does Not Meet Standard The last sentence in Main Sights could be rephrased. I am confused by the "ornate gilt Renaissance clock” sentence. If it is a quote, maybe it could be rephrased in your own words. Also the opinion, “this really is a beautiful clock and area to behold” should be excluded or somehow backed with evidence. “In the late 1800s, there was a sudden revival to maintain their old landmarks. Because of this, Rouen” seems to be a run on. Combine them or start the second sentence differently.

Organization
Meets Standard

Coding
Exceeds Standard

Validity
Nearly Meets Standard Information looks accurately accredited but some claims should not be made as they can’t be proven. “this really is a beautiful clock and area to behold” and some other opinion like statements could be improved. This would also help with the language portion and make it more similar to an encyclopedia.

Completion
Exceeds Standard Good and balanced information added.

Relevance
Nearly Meets Standard I believe some of the content in the second section about the clock is lacking relevance.

4/23/2019 Evaluation by Gabbym9903

 * Points: 38.5/40
 * Grade: 96.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Expectations I did not find any spelling or grammar mistakes.

Language
Needs Improvement The language of the post is overall good but I would recommend less quotations so that it sounds more like an encyclopedia rather than an article.

Organization
Needs improvement. I would recommend splitting these 2 paragraphs into more with 5-6 sentences each.

Coding
Meets Expectations The coding looks good and the structure of the information is well-maintained.

Validity
Meets expectations The sources you have used seem accurate and the information is well-presented.

Completion
Exceeds expectations You have included a lot of information and it is presented in an engaging way, making your post complete.

Relevance
Exceeds expectations All the information included is accurate and relevant to the topic and it flows well with the Wikipedia page.

5/4/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 12:50, 4 May 2019 (UTC)

It seems you are making errors which you would not have done, had you been paying close attention to the WikiEdu modules. However, you do not appear on my WikiEdu list, making me wonder if you have even been using that engine at all.


 * Points: 32.5/40
 * Grade: 81.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Does not meet standard.
 * "In the late 1800's there,..." No apostrophe: 1800s. It is plural, not possessive.
 * "...where it's architecture..." No apostrophe: its. In this case, the possessive does not use an apostrophe. It's is ALWAYS a contraction of 'it is'.
 * "in 1889 the project..." This direct quote (which should not be used to begin with) begins without a capital letter.
 * There are numbers, strangely appearing in places in the text. Are these citations in the original text that you lifted?
 * "...restoration.he project..." Seems to be missing a space and capital 'T'.

Language
Does not meet standard.
 * As Audrey pointed out, above, there is opinionated language. Wikipedia needs to remain factual.
 * "...to figure out..." is informal language
 * "...this cathedral has a little bit from over 300 years of architecture." Informal and unclear language.

Organization
Meets standard. With (now) two large paragraphs about two dominant sights in Rouen, it would be great to have headers for them, so that they appear in the page's table of contents.

Coding
Nearly meets standard. Two of the references are created with template code (without a template identified), rather than simply using the citation engine native to Wikipedia.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Does not meet standard. Large sections of text were copied and pasted from the source articles, rather than paraphrased, according to the WikiEdu instructions. Given that those texts were written in different contexts with different purposes, their language does not match the needs of Wikipedia. Reforming that language into your own fitting language is part of this complete project.

Relevance
Meets standard.

5/17/2019 Evaluation by afackrell
afackrell (talk) 20:40, 17 May 2019 (PST)


 * Points: 33/40
 * Grade: 82%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard. You are missing a space in between "Africa.Most" I belive some of the "i"'s in the second paragraph should be capatalized. Also, magnificent is misspelled.

Language
Nearly meets standard. I believe we are to avoid long quotes. You have a pretty legthy one in the first pargraph that could be paraphrased and quoted.

Organization
Meets standard. Good paragraphs and headers.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Does not meet standard. Your legth of information meets the requirement but you only have 8/10 sources.

Relevance
Meets standard.

6/6/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 11:18, 7 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 27/40
 * Grade: 67.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...the Moriscos were truly..." Since you're talking about something in the past before something else in the past, you need to use the perfect past, rather than the simple past.
 * "...The late 1600's left..." omit apostrophe. This is plural, not possessive.
 * "... heir, and..." Omit comma.
 * "...Vallavecchia, wanted the..." Omit comma.
 * "...University Pres." Press is misspelled.

Language
Does not meet standard.
 * "...the king justified..." which king?
 * "Although ... Spain." Large block quotes are out of place on Wikipedia. This was covered in the tutorial.
 * "They were concentrated..." While this is not your text, by putting a segment about Jews in between it and a segment about Moriscos, you are suggesting that 'they' refers to Jews rather than Moriscos.
 * "...and dodgy lines..." Dodgy is a bit of a dodgy term for using in an encyclopedia. Try a more formal word instead.
 * "...much growth during this time in the textile industry." This reads a little awkwardly. Maybe "much growth in the textile industry during this time."
 * "...shows the magnificent elegance..." non-neutral language.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.
 * Though it would have been helpful if you marked your additions in bold so that I could more easily discern what you did.

Validity
standard?
 * "...and the onset of the Black Death,..." The Black Death was a 14th century affair. This section is about the 17th century.
 * "...The late 1600's left Valencia with a population decline to 6 million..." Valencia had a population of 6 million in the late 1600s??!!!
 * "...the Nueva Planta decrees ... which were signed January 1716." There were a number of decrees. Only the last of them was issued on that date.

Completion
Does not meet standard. There is not quite as much text added as I would have hoped for, and you are two references shy of the requirement.

Relevance
Does not meet standard.
 * Many of your additions do not deal with Valencia specifically. They provide general context.
 * Some of your text and image additions regards the Palau de Justícia in Barcelona, which is in Barcelona, and was built in the 19th century.