User talk:Parisornthep/sandbox

Hi! I can see that you are thinking about a variety of articles. You should consider how much is already on there. For example, it is suggested that the chlorophyl article needs something about health benefits. That may be a good think to contribute, but first you need to find ten sources specific to that topic so that you have something substantial to contribute. Take some time to look for sources so that you can make an informed decision about which topic will help you meet the writing requirement for the class. Lethornton (talk) 03:26, 2 March 2018 (UTC)

You have some good ideas for brining in more science to the inflorescence page. Make sure that you add links to other pages, such as Arabidopsis, when explaining the genetics from a model system. Lethornton (talk) 20:42, 15 March 2018 (UTC)

• Grammatical/ Spelling errors

o Genes that shape inflorescence development *have been studied at great length.

o Inflorescence-feeding insect herbivores shape inflorescences *by reducing lifetime fitness

• Fit: Your draft expands on topics alluded to in the Wiki article, so your addition perfectly fits in.

• Organization: The flow and organization of your draft is intuitive, but it would be helpful if you separated inflorescence development and structure into different topics instead of putting them together under “Meristems and Inflorescence Architecture.” I think it may make your article better if you either identified a couple of the inflorescence intermediates or posted a link to a Wiki article that talks about them. While shorter sentences are generally better in scientific writing, your sentences may be a little too choppy. Some of your sentences could be merged and made a little more complex without confusing the reader, so I would think about that.

• Tone: Your tone is very objective which is exactly what it should be so great job.

• Content: I think you described the genetic background of inflorescences very well, but the environmental influences section needs to be expanded a little more. I would get a little specific with how either insect or heat affects inflorescence growth or influenced inflorescence evolution. Similarly, I would include some examples about how inflorescence architecture affects the quality and quantity of offspring. Lastly, as I mentioned earlier, I would expand on the plants with flower and inflorescence intermediates and maybe give a few examples. Mahmoua4 (talk) 16:08, 27 March 2018 (UTC)Ahmed Mahmoud

Instructor Comments: It is clear that you have put a lot of thought into the molecular genetic information that will expand on explaining inflorescence structure and development. It is not clear where you will put your new sections in the structure of the existing article. Think about where it should fit with out feeling like it is just tacked on the end. You have links to other articles and ideas for improving a few of the other sections on the page. Great work! Lethornton (talk) 02:10, 15 April 2018 (UTC)