User talk:Pashf001/Karyosome

Peer Review
Hi!

I approve of the many changes you made in the article to make it clear and up-to-date. You undoubtedly did your research based on the amount of information added to the article, which allows readers a better understanding and more informative background than what once was about Karyosomes. The original (untouched) article is vague for a science topic and short, so making the additions you did made it more appealing to a science background.

There are a couple of changes I suggest. Readers would enjoy a visual, so adding a photo would draw more attention and curiosity from the reader. Adding a photo and description of what it is under would do wonders. Also, with the information added, which was great, more critiquing for sentence structure and grammar can be incorporated. Finally, adding an overview would be helpful. The separated categories are informative, but in addition to that, adding an overview/summary would give the reader a refresher on the material.

The effort is commendable, and the amount which was added to the original is appreciated. You did well adding to the critical part, like the formation and function of Karyosomes. The corrections made are a clear gist of the topic and original; well done.

Bike2022 (talk) 03:29, 7 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Hello!
 * Thank you for all the kind feedback.
 * For starters, I added a photo that shows what an encapsulated and un-capsulated karyosome looks like within an oocyte nucleus . I did this because the majority of my Wikipedia page highlighted the importance of both types of karyosomes. In addition I completely agree with your comment about sentence structure and grammar. Hence why, I revised and fixed any grammatical errors that I may have had within my Wikipedia page. Any paragraphs that lacked flow, were adjusted and were made brief. Lastly, I added an overview section to provide the reader with an overall idea of what karyosomes are.
 * Once again, I appreciate all the feedback. I hope you approve of all the changes.
 * Pashf001 (talk) 00:15, 21 November 2022 (UTC)