User talk:Passerinacyanea

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Hello, Passerinacyanea, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Crime among women in the united states
Hi, Passerinacyanea. I've made a few changes to your draft. I tried to remove some things which were more general than the subject itself, including some of the history of the drug war and an ethnographic bit referring to australia. Remember, wikipedia readers have already found your article (once you post it), they're looking for things which contribute to women committing crimes in the US, distinct from men. It's important to give historical context (esp. for example if you have disparate sentencing introduced), but wikilinks to related articles can help with that.

What did you think the title of this should be? Are you describing factors or rate or history? An accurate, neutral title is important because it's the first clue for a reader what the article is about. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:32, 1 June 2016 (UTC)