User talk:Passionforbaking/Learning through play

Peer Review
Hello Passionforbaking,

I have completed a peer review of your Sandbox draft of learning through play.

Slk333 (talk) 16:38, 26 March 2024 (UTC)

Instructor Feedback
You've added a lot of great material to the article. I have a few additional suggestions:

Capitalize all words over three letters in the headings. For "Definitions of Work and Play", only include “work” in the header if you are actually going to define it.

I would move this material to the play-based learning programs section: “The Enriched curriculum is an educational program designed to enhance learning experiences for children. It incorporates elements of play-based learning, emphasizing skills like listening, concentration, and communication. This curriculum expands upon nursery education by incorporating both outdoor physical activities and indoor play within smaller group settings. [1] Some Critics worry that the enriched curriculum might not work for all kids, especially those from different backgrounds. They're concerned it might delay reading and writing lessons, needing extra resources, and not preparing kids well for later school. There's also a question about whether it meets the needs of different types of learners. [2]"

In the Free Play section you should define free play.

The language in the Free Play section is a little biased in making strong positive claims about it. Introduce some qualifiers like “can,” “may,” and “are thought to.”

Change the numbered list to bullet points. Numbered lists are typically only used when hierarchical order is implied.

Examples of teacher-directed play may be helpful.

The play-based learning section has too many quotations, which are discouraged by Wikipedia. These should be summarized and paraphrased.

In the Impact of Covid section, replace the in-text citations with foot notes.

This sentence (and some that follow) uses second person voice and should be shifted to third person voice: “To support children, we must promote play-based learning by providing access to play spaces and encouraging creative play at school and home.” Lndmayg (talk) 15:34, 6 April 2024 (UTC)