User talk:Patrick Callan/sandbox

Feedback
Hey! Here's the feedback for your sandbox article. If you have any questions, let me know.
 * Try to address the pre-existing tags on the article, if you can
 * Intro should be longer - summarize the main sections of the article in 1-2 paragraphs (WP:LEAD)
 * Aim for a minimum of one citation per paragraph, more as needed
 * Address the redundancy between the pre-existing material and your additions - most notably the doubled 2008 section
 * Don't over-rely on one or two sources - try to back them up with supplementary references wherever possible
 * When repeating identical references, use WP:NAMEDREFS to avoid redundancy
 * If you'd like to move this into the mainspace, you can merge it into the existing article by copy-paste - just make sure to note in your edit summary where you're copying from. Nikkimaria (talk) 12:37, 10 April 2012 (UTC)