User talk:PaulTafler/sandbox

Jamisonahrens (talk) 14:01, 19 November 2019 (UTC)Jamison Ahrens - All the information seems to be good, relevant, and neutral. One thing I think you can add is the dates in which the siege happened. Along with this, there are some grammar adjustments to be made, such as the sentence "The damages might not be catastrophic, but they were significant, German artillery and bombers destroyed 16% of the city's housing". This seems to be a run-on sentence. Also, make sure you are talking in the past tense in all the sentences. For example, the sentence "Since the city was blockaded, nothing can move in or out of the city" should be "Since the city was blockaded, nothing COULD move in or out of the city". All in all, just a few minor adjustments but great job!

So far the article is coming along good. The information you added seems to be a strong addition to the article that is relevant to the topic. My main suggestions with your entry would be to add the dates of when these events occurred and cite that information with another source. DigitalIdentityProject19 (talk) 01:52, 20 November 2019 (UTC)