User talk:PearlNghe/sandbox

Congrats
Good for you for getting your draft up! --Jbdolphin (talk) 19:28, 14 April 2021 (UTC)

Comments
Good start, PearlNghe, but much of this material seems to be taken directly from your paper, which is more of an argument style. I suggest that you review the notes that I made on your paper as many of the same suggestions apply here. It is also important to note that this needs to be an encyclopedia entry and that must be written from a very neutral perspective based on the best facts you can gather. It is not clear from your submission whether you intend to create a whole new article. I would argue against this for a couple of reasons. There are at least two articles already that relate to this topic: Bathroom Bill and Unisex public toilets, and all you really need to do is pick the most salient elements from your research to improve one of these. I encourage you to study both of these articles and their talk pages, think about your research in relationship to them and pick one or two bits that would improve one of the other of them. Then revise for your final submission accordingly. --Jbdolphin (talk) 07:12, 12 May 2021 (UTC)

Hey Pearl, I enjoyed reading the article and reading what you added. I like how you added your opinion in the article! It had a lot of information and everything looks properly cited. It looks like you did a lot of research and took time editing your sandbox. Overall the final article looks great! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jeanetttee (talk • contribs) 19:37, 15 May 2021 (UTC)