User talk:PeterYatesVT/sandbox

Ryan Kocer
For the section on the sportsperson with the disability, the sports section should be moved to the top section of the article. This is what would make this person notable. The personal details about why they got their disability are generally secondary details, explaining the context and personal biography. Most sportspeople, disability or not, are organized this way with biographical details or near the bottom. You would not put how they got their disability into a separate section, unless it was in a context that was inherently notable and likely connected to originating notability (For example: Smith was an elite cyclist, competing for the Bottled Water team and participating in the Tour de France. While competing in the Tour de Italy, he was involved in a crash with another cyclist which resulted in specific disability. [supplementary disability acquisition information, like where treated, cost, how it impacted training.)  If they are in a biography section near the top, they tend to be short paragraphs, of no more than 5 lines. And then the rest of the structure is around that. Work to add more information on the sports, making a logical organization using subject heading levels. Use headings to make clear from the onset what sports he participated reading it, I am at times a bit stuck trying to figure that out.

Depending on structure, you could go with something like this:
 * Sports
 * Wrestling
 * Soccer
 * High school
 * University
 * National amputee football team
 * Awards
 * Personal life

Or something like this:
 * Biography
 * Education
 * Disability
 * Sports
 * Wrestling
 * Soccer
 * High school
 * University
 * National amputee football team
 * Awards

--LauraHale (talk) 07:30, 16 October 2018 (UTC)