User talk:Peyton Tooze/Laurel van der Wal

Hi Peyton! This is a very good draft for your article. I really enjoy the structure that you have set up and how the biography is in chronological order regarding the series of events in your subject's life. The lead is also descriptive while being short and to the point. However, I would remove the contents section that you created as Wikipedia already generated a contents section for you when you created the content of your article. Additionally, I would remove the Sources section that you have because you probably already have those sources in their proper citation format in the References section. Other than that, the article seems very solid with reliable information, good sources, and a neutral standpoint. Great work! Obermirek (talk) 21:08, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Peyton! I just finished peer reviewing your article, I left a comment on the bottom that summarizes my thoughts. Great job so far! Sbowen99 (talk) 05:27, 17 November 2020 (UTC)