User talk:Pgunter99/Alcohol abuse

''PGunter99, I have reviewed your draft and added my peer review through the peer review link in wiki. I hope it suffices. Chanda''

Hello. Social support is a good inclusion for this article. Consider some of the kinds of social support you could include here. Family, friends, interventions, local support groups, and AA are all social support, but they may have different influences on the progression of someone trying to end their alcohol problem. Also, if you want to expand to other areas of the article, it looks like the Causes section is lacking. It mentions mental illness. What illnesses lead to alcohol abuse most often? What about family history? Great job!Red027 (talk) 22:29, 28 February 2021 (UTC)

''Hi Red027! Thank you for your suggestions, I found them very helpful. I really like your idea of talking about different types of social support, I feel like that would be a great addition to my contribution of the article. I will also consider adding to the causes section. Thank you!-Peyton ''

Hey Peyton! I think the overall topic you wish to include is very good however I think it is hard to read. For example, this sentence: "Feeling stigmatized has been linked to increased levels of depression and anxiety, decreased levels of self esteem, and sleeping poorly (cite source number two here)" is difficult to understand. I believe you could swap it to this to make it clearer: "The stigmatization of individuals who abuse alcohol has been linked to increased levels of depression, increased levels of anxiety, decreased levels of self-esteem, and poor sleeping habits." Along with that, I believe you should include more "things" that can reduce the stigma like the social support you mentioned. Keep up the good work! CannonCH (talk) 01:52, 1 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey CannonChH. I really appreciate your tips on how to make my writing more clear. Your wording is a lot easier to understand than mine, so I will definitely use your advise. Thank you!-Peyton