User talk:Phautea

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Hi Patricia, here are some edits/questions organized by the different sections you include on this wiki page:

GENERAL INTRO (1) "...he then focused on the fluxus and relationship of things around him" - Specify what you mean by this. (2) "A catalytic figure in the Arte Povera movement, concentrated in Turin in the late 60s, Gilardi’s utopian and unselfish dedication to connecting neo-avant garde artists across Western Europe and North America made him one of the most influential artistic figures of the period, albeit not the most famous."- What do you mean by "unselfish dedication"? Also, I think you can omit that last statement "albeit not the most famous" just because it is difficult to qualify the very subjective question of who is/isn't the most famous figure of any movement.

WORKS There is mention of his performative works beginning in 1966; if you have any details on these performances, it would be very helpful to visualize the works and how they might relate to his other work.

AFTER ARTE POVERA IN ITALY "Among the various creations remember to install pulse, in which the heartbeat of the observer of the work - recorded by a sensor - determines changes the whole; Absolut, forest of synthetic materials, translucent and cold shared emotion, nvolves two people in a performance interactive computing, referring to new approaches and exchange in society: virtual and globalized." - Although your description and interpretation of these works are valuable, this sentence definitely needs to be grammatically revised, as it is a bit confusing. Might I suggest that you cut the sentence into two so that it doesn't read as a run-on?

Vsmoon (talk) 17:47, 2 April 2013 (UTC)

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