User talk:Philip Nyberg/sandbox

Philip's peer review
Sources and citations are well incorporated into your writing. Citations located at the end of the sentence where it is used. Source list is located on bottom of page where they should be. None of the sources published come across as bias, they are more informative. In general, great job in incorporating your facts from your sources. The author plans to edit the work of another person to make some more clarifying points for the main idea of the article. From the looks of the first paragraph edited, you did a good job in expanding the information into a clear argument. Continue in editing on the paragraphs already included on your page, you do a good job in editing it to make it sound more superior. Suggestions for improvement: Re-read edited work to improve quality of writing as well as grammar mistakes. LaurenUrbina

Citations are easy to access and use to edit the information already present in the article. More information could probably be added to sections based on newer sources. Good job finding sources to help edit. MaxGentino (talk) 14:10, 23 October 2018 (UTC)MaxGentino