User talk:Piledriver Waltz/sandbox 2

Hey folks, this peer review was provided to your group by Austin Page:

This article was actually the article I initially reviewed in this class. On my initial review, I pointed out that some citations needed to be added to some facts, which seemed to have been done. Furthermore, the paper reads well, it is factual and doesn't take any biased points of view. One thing I feel this article needs is more depth by adding your own section, perhaps a prologue of some sorts, to give some context of what led up to the Peace of Westphalia. All around a good article, and a difficult one to review as there was previously a good amount of the article completed. Final comments: Great job completing the sections that are incomplete, but perhaps think of adding your own section at the start for more context!

-- Response -- Hi Austin,

Thank you for the constructive feedback! Yes, we have added most citations and will be adding more to the final draft. I agree, especially since this is such an in-depth article, that we need to add several more sections. My group and I will be spending a day or two at the library, checking out books and adding several sections to the final draft. A prologue is also a great idea - considering that war waged in Europe for 30 years, much context is needed! It was a major historical event. That is one thing we hadn't thought of doing. There are many great sources at QEII which we can draw upon for the article. The amount of work done on this subject means there is a huge amount of information we can add - we will add a concise prologue, along with several more in-depth sections, and expand upon the relevance of this event to the modern field of Political Science.

Cheers,

Michael Kennedy, Daniel Condon, Kristen Keating — Preceding unsigned comment added by Piledriver Waltz (talk • contribs) 20:00, 22 March 2018 (UTC)