User talk:Pinkcats99/Cornelia (mother of the Gracchi)

Hello, I just got done reading your wiki page and now I am here to leave my peer review for you. I would like to begin by stating that your topic seems to be well researched and that you found a lot of information on your topic. I also think that the way you organized the information makes sense. I will evaluate each section of your wiki page in order to give you a clearer picture of what I think you did well on and what needs to be improved. Biography: Overall, I feel you established the connection with her sons, which is important to why she is important. Off the bat I do not get a solid understanding of who this woman was. When was she born? Where is she from? What is the time period? Why was she important? I feel like a brief introduction or lead before the biography with a summarized version of who was she was and why she was important (similar to providing a definition of who she is) would anchor the page and make the biography flow nicely with the rest of the content. Role in Son's Political Career: You have a good start and a solid base to add to. It is stated that this is the "most important aspect of her life", so I think exploring the role she played in her son's political career will help the reader understand why she is important. Who were her sons (politicians, government officials, emperors, etc.)? How did she help their careers? What was her role? How long did this role last? Did she create change? I feel like the answers to these questions will round out this section and fill in the gaps. Cornelia's Letter Excerpts: I feel like the letter excerpts are very helpful in describing Cornelia and describing other people's perspective on her. I feel like this helps the reader create a fuller image of who she was. The only thing I would add to this section is linking names such as "Cicero" because Wikipedia likes links. Changing Legacy Over Time: This section is well thought out and the information is well organized. I found the second sentence to be unclear, what is trying to be signified? I feel like the wording is off or may need to be two sentences. This section also has words like "problematic" and "controversial" which may not create a neutral tone to the reader. Modern Representations and The Cornelia Statue sections both seemed to be good and I do not think you need to improve them unless you find more information on them later. I would encourage you to round out the sections I mentioned to fill in the gaps and link as many words as you can. Overall, I can tell that you put a lot of time, effort and research into your wiki page. Your sources all seemed to be reliable and you referenced them often, which is great. Good job and good luck improving your page. Forgetfulpumpkin (talk) 07:00, 18 November 2020 (UTC)