User talk:Pjbpdx/new sandbox lisbon

06/11/2019 Evaluation by Kate Mackie
Points: 30/40 Grade: 75%

Spelling/Grammar Meets standard.

Language Meets standard.

Organization Meets standard. I like how you created a subheading for "tourism" under "Economy" because it really is rising to be a large contributor to the Lisbon economy. In your tourism section, I would consider re-organizing your sentences... You should start off with how much the tourism industry has grown, then go into aircraft growth and so-on. Start general, then get specific.

Coding Meets standard.

Validity Meets standard. No use of bias.

Completion Meets standard.

Relevance Meets standard. In the end of the Economy section you discuss male unemployment, why is that relevant having stats for just the male employment? It made me curious if perhaps Lisbonite industries are male dominant, or what other factors there are.

Sources Meets standard.

Citations Meets standard.

References Below standard. Need more references. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Katemackie (talk • contribs) 15:28, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

06/09/2018 Evaluation by User:Sackhy
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sackhy

Points: 38/40 Grade: 100%

Spelling/Grammar — No major mistakes in the work — Meets standard.

Language — Good use of encyclopedic tone, as well as a neutral tone — Meets standard.

Organization — The work was easy to follow and had a natural flow — Meets standard.

Coding — Good coding — Meets standard.

Validity — Good information with reliable sources — Meets standard.

Completion — Work is still not completed at the moment— Does not meet standard.

Relevance — All of your contributions are relevant — Meets standard.

Sources — You have high quality sources, but at the moment, you’re not at twenty yet — Does not meet standard.

Citations — Properly formatted — Meets standard.

References — Properly formatted — Meets standard. Sackhy (talk) 08:32, 9 June 2019 (UTC)

6/17/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 14:59, 17 June 2019 (UTC)

There's some good stuff here, which you should probably add to Wikipedia with some revision (see references and organization in particular).
 * Points: 35/40
 * Grade: 87.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * "... is on it's way..." its (no apostrophe).

Language
Meets standard.
 * "In the nation, Lisbon..." while perfectly conventional with the American use of phrases, this makes sense. However, to other peoples 'nation' means something slightly different (see link). It would be better to say: "Within Portugal, Lisbon is..."

Organization
Does not meet standard.
 * I see what you're saying about not wanting to discard what was already there. It's frequently a good thing to be respectful of other's people's work. Still, I think that you could rework the organization somewhat more, to have each paragraph cover a separate topic and to cut down on 1-2 sentence paragraphs about ad hoc topics.
 * I trust that the first paragraph in the current article ("The Lisbon region ... river (Rio Tejo).") will remain as-is, and you are writing from there onward.
 * The first sentences seem rather ad hoc.
 * The original line "Lisbon is the home of Web Summit, the largest tech event in the world." is in this draft twice.
 * What you say about "low cost airline carrier development", probably is best added to the section on air travel, under the transportation section. While clearly related to tourism, what you have written does not explicitly touch on tourism.
 * Under the original article's section on 'Culture', there is a 'see-also' link to Tourism in Lisbon. It would be good to also add that to your section (and add some of your data to that article as well - especially in the introductory section), and perhaps remove that template from the Culture section.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.
 * I don't think you treat fairly with the intent of your source with regard to what you say about tourism in the Bairro Alto. Remember that your role is not to be a cheerleader of tourism or Lisbon, but someone who reports relevant facts and interpretations.

Completion
Meets standard.

Relevance
Meets standard.
 * Why do you mention just 'Lisbon's male unemployment rate', rather than female or all?