User talk:Plumbla/sandbox

Peer Review Suggestions (MKassmeier)
Hi Plumbla! I think you have already provided great additions to the original Youth unemployment article. Your tone remains neutral throughout your writing, and the structure of your article draft is easy to follow both while reading and just visually scanning the content. I would consider, however, moving your case study section to the last section before your references. Right now, the flow of the articles feels slightly interrupted by the placement of the that section. The information within your article provides a global sociological approach to youth studies, but I would consider elaborating upon each section because most of the sections only have 2-3 sentences. Also, try to incorporate at least one relevant image into your article. There are a decent amount of hyperlinks within the article already, but I do not think any other articles are hyperlinked to your own article yet. (Maybe try linking to Youth unemployment in the United Kingdom or Unemployment.) Your sources are reliable, but I would continue researching to find relevant information to include within your draft for next week. Consider adding more case studies (such as China or Latin American countries) to add more of a global perspective. Here are some ideas for articles:

http://cowles-proxy.drake.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=psyh&AN=2012-22316-003&scope=site

http://cowles-proxy.drake.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=403639&scope=site

MKassmeier (talk) 19:27, 27 April 2013 (UTC)