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What to include in your peer review:

First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? Make sure to think about reviewing the following sections: Lead, organization, balance, neutral content, sources. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article?

Patricia, Your article is very well versed. You provide the reader with two neutral/balanced sides of the debate and sufficient sources. I truly am receptive to the quote, "sex positive feminists believe that a democratic morality should judge sexual activity by the way partners treat one another, the presence or absence of coercion, and the quantity and quality of the pleasures they provide.” Society seems to disregard that side of the sex worker debate.  It would be good for readers to possibly know the recognized sex worker abolitionists and sex positive feminists that have conducted research /studies/lectures on the issue (that way Wiki readers can enhance their knowledge of the issue).  This article is relevant to my article on internalized sexism due to the fact many critics of sex work and sex workers themselves experience internalized misogyny.  They express it through minimizing the value of women, mistrusting women, and believing gender bias in favor of men.  The implications of internalized misogyny include psychological disorders such as depression, eating disorders, low self-esteem, and less social support among women. Anyhow, you appear to be very passionate about the issue in the article! Happy Endeavors, DeeDfrankl7 (talk) 20:37, 9 December 2016 (UTC)

Patricia,

Peer review response on your review - Thank you for your critique! I planned on adding my Wiki entry into the Internalized Sexism section regarding Combating Internalized Sexism. I made the changes to the font for the title of bell hooks' book and removed the "thus" blurb - Now, it flows better... Dfrankl7 (talk) 07:05, 10 December 2016 (UTC)