User talk:Poebraxton/Scotts Valley Band of Pomo Indians of California

HI BRAXTON: REALLY GOOD START HERE AND I CAN SEE THAT YOU HAVE MADE A GOOD START ON THIS NEW ARTICLE. THE SECTIONS YOU'VE COMPLETED LOOK GOOD AND YOU'VE FIGURED OUT THE WIKIPEDIA FORMATTING. THE OPENING SECTION DOES THE JOB IT SHOULD. YOUR WRITING IS STRAIGHTFORWARD AND CLEAR BUT YOU HAVE SENTENCES THAT ARE CLAIMS THAT YOU CAN'T PROVE WITHOUT A CITATION. ALSO THINK ABOUT DETAILS AND BACKGROUND AN ENCYCLOPEDIA AUDIENCE NEEDS. YOU PROBABLY HAVE TO EXPLAIN SOME BASICS ABOUT POMOS AND THE CALIFORNIA INDIAN GROUPS IN GENERAL. YOU CAN USE LINKS TO GIVE PEOPLE SOME BACKGROUND ABOUT OTHER PLACES AND PEOPLES.

THE NEXT STEP IS TO FINISH UP THE SECTIONS YOU HAVE LAID OUT HERE, BUT THE BIGGEST ISSUE IS FINDING MORE AND BETTER SOURCES. YOU HAVE A COUPLE OF VERY OUTDATED ARTICLES SO YOU NEED TO SPEND SOME TIME FINDING AND ADDING TO YOUR REFERENCES AND CITATIONS. LOOK ON THE OU LIBRARY WEBSITE AND PLAY AROUND WITH SOME SEARCH TERMS, BEYOND POMO OR SCOTTS VALLEY. THERE IS A LOT OF GOOD RECENT MATERIAL AVAILABLE ONLINE, ESPECIALLY MORE RECENT ARTICLES. THERE ARE SOME ONLINE ENCYCLOPEDIAS, REALLY SPECIFIC ONES LIKE THE Salomon, Frank, and Schwartz, Stuart B. The Cambridge History of the Native Peoples of the Americas. Cambridge University Press, 1999 - we have online access to this from OU. IT WILL GIVE YOU ACCURATE, BASIC INFORMATION ABOUT THE LARGER CALIFORNIA GROUPS.

GOOD START AND JUST KEEP GOING. (I'M PUTTING A CHECKLIST OF THINGS TO THINK THROUGH FOR YOUR FINAL VERSION JUST BELOW MY NAME. . . )

ANNE HYDE

LEAD: Does your lead summarize the entire article by briefly covering all important aspects of the topic? Does it work as an outline for the whole article?

First sentence: does it serve as a definition of the article topic, with the topic itself — be it a person, place, thing, idea or concept — in bold, and a brief description that puts it into context.

(Example: Anna Anderson (c. 16 December 1896 – 12 February 1984) was the best known of several impostors who claimed to be Grand Duchess Anastasia of Russia.)

BODY: Fact-based, not persuasive writing. The article is a description of the information you can find about a topic, based on good sources.

Did you write in your own words? Check that the article doesn’t contain excessive quotations, or copy any sources, even if you’ve given them credit.

Does the article let the reader decide for themselves? Avoid persuasive language? Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?

Did you proofread? Basic grammar and spelling are correct? Complete sentences? Remove first-person (“I/we”) or second-person (“you”) writing.

Formal tone and simple language? No technical language or jargon? Check that you’ve explained acronyms and jargon in simple English the first time you use them.

Is your formatting consistent with the rest of Wikipedia? No bullet-pointed lists or too many headings in your article.

SOURCES: Is every claim cited to a reliable source?

Are there unsourced statements? Are there enough sources

Are the sources reliable and authoritative. Does each source have citations – footnotes, bibliography, etc.

Good sources include textbooks or academic journals. Don’t cite blog posts.

WHAT ABOUT IMAGES, LINKS?Afh1858 (talk) 17:09, 11 April 2020 (UTC)