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Article Evaluation 1

In this post, I will be examining an article from Wikipedia titled "Research".

The article when skimmed over, looks to be very well done. This is because for one thing, the box at the beginning of the article has a lot of different links which lead you to different parts of the article. Most of these links refer readers to sections dealing with different subjects of research, thereby slightly broadening the article. Then after i skimmed the article, I started to read it and i noticed a number of things about it. I began to really trust this article because of the amount of sources it possesses. Subject matter has a lot to do with how many sources an article has but in this case, the amount of sources (57 to be exact) is acceptable for a reader to receive accurate information. the article also has many links embedded within the text. This allows readers to continue reading if they are curious and in a way offer even more legitimacy. Overall this article is very well written and considering the difficulty it must have taken to research the topic of research, this article in my book is an A.

Article Evaluation 2

In this post I will be evaluating an article from Wikipedia titled "Jimmy Wales".

The first paragraph of an article is the most important part of an article because if someone is just trying to prove something to their friends or get a quick answer about this man, they don't want to scroll all the way down and then try and find the information they are looking for. I feel like the first paragraph is somewhat OK but that it does not include enough information about his business. I wish the writer of the article would have included just a sentence or two about who the other founders were and include the second paragraph in the first. The article is extremely reliable due to the 173 sources it uses, many of which include articles from USA Today, the New York Times, Forbes, and CBS. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:10, 12 April 2018 (UTC)

Possible topics
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:College_football_stubs

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:1980s_country_song_stubs

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/James_McMullin

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shane_Costa — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 17:41, 16 April 2018 (UTC)

Topic Decision
I looked at all the links above and have decided to go in a completely different direction. I was watching golf on Sunday and it occurred to me that when we look away from the stars of the game such as Jordan Speith, Tiger Woods, Ricky Fowler, and Dustin Johnson, there are tons of young players fighting to grab a spot on the PGA Tour. Many of these amateurs are active on the Web.com tour and I myself have even caddied for one of them at my local country club. The reason why i chose to go in this direction is because a lot of these guys are not well known and the amount of information about them while not abundant is enough for me to improve on some of these guys's articles. I reached out to my dad, the biggest golf guru i know and asked him who he thinks i should write about. He gave me two optios. One was to write about a golfer named Doug Ghim, a local guy out of Arlington Heights, IL who recently made the cut at the 2018 Masters and who recently turned pro in June of last year after a great performance at the US Open. Another option was to write about a golfer named Nick Hardy, another local guy from Northbrook, IL and who is currently playing for the UIUC golf team. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:57, 17 April 2018 (UTC) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nick_Hardy — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 17:08, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Article Contributios
The article about Nick Hardy is a decent one but it leaves out some important information in the form of a content gap. The biggest content gap in my opinion is his college career. College golf is a very popular sport however, it doesn't receive as much coverage as many other college sports such as football, basketball, and baseball. There is plenty of information that can be added such who were his coaches, scores, achievements, awards, national championships, conference championships, etc. He is a skillful player who has however only made one cut at the 2015 US Open. The 2015 US Open is only mentioned in two sentences or so and in a chart listing his finishes. I feel as if there is a lot more to write about when it comes to how he performed. One of things i can do to offer even more insight to his career is to create a chart and replicate the scorecard from his tour starts. In summary, the biggest thing i can do in terms of improving Nick Hardy's page is to introduce more subtopics and headers about specific events and describe them in great detail. The details are very specific but people who have love the game of golf, always pay attention to the smallest details, weather it be in their swing or analyzing their favorite golfers statistics. Im looking forward to discovering more about this up and coming talented golfer. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:34, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

My Sources
http://fightingillini.com/roster.aspx?rp_id=6733 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:35, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

This link will be used primarily for describing his High School career. Some people believe this is to small of a thing to write about but i tend to think that this is an area that can use some writing because a lot of times amateur golf gurus look at stats of layers at previous levels. In addition to noting his high school golf achievement, i believe more attention is on the professional junior championships and tournaments he played in and how that put him in a position to get onto the amateur tour. The biggest thing i can list in this area would be his notable tournaments he won and his ranking. In sports, everything is based off of records and or rankings.

http://www.chicagotribune.com/suburbs/northbrook/sports/ct-nbs-nick-hardy-golf-web-com-tour-tl-0417-story.html — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:46, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

https://ijga.bluegolf.com/bluegolf/ijga10/profile/nhardy1/tresults.htm? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:52, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

https://www.cbssports.com/golf/players/playerpage/2176413/nick-hardy — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:54, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Golf is a game with a microscopic margin of error. His performance in the US Open was good but there were a few key moments not listed in in that portion of the essay that were very small and yet incredibly costly mistakes. Listing these mistakes gives readers an idea of what his strengths and weaknesses. For example, Tiger Woods excels in his approach game, Jordan Speith excels in putting, and Dustin Johnson excels at driving the ball. All these things will make it easy for readers to make their own image of his game and therefore judge what kind and how good of a player he is.

http://m.espn.com/golf/playercast

Outline
High School Career -American Junior Golf Association Tournaments -Ranking Nationaly -Amateur Open

College Career -What other schools did he have offers from and why did he go to Illinois? -Freshamn Year -Sophomore Year -Junior Year -Qualifiers -US Open -Scorecard -Detailed description of performance (WITHOUT SOUNDING BIASED OR AS A CRITIC) -Cuts Missed and Made -Achievements (NOT COUNTING TOURNAMENTS AND EVENTS WON)''' -BIG 10 Achievements -Name Brand Awards -Player Awards -Illinois Career Stats

Future -Invitations received and tournaments expected to play in — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:38, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

Lead Section (Draft)
Nick Hardy is a amateur golfer from Northbrook, IL. Hardy is currently playing college golf for the University of Illinois in Urbana Champaign mens golf team who has also played at the professional level in the Us Open and in the John Deere Classic. In addition, Hardy has won a number of Junior championships both in the state of Illinois and nationally. He has a major list of notable amateur wins spanning from his high school career at Glenbrook North to Illinois State amateur championship. The 22 year old Hardy is currently helping his Fighting Illini golf team to a national championship but is expected to go on the PGA Tour next season. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.13.14.229 (talk) 14:29, 23 April 2018 (UTC)

High School Career (Draft)
In high school, Hardy had a number of good showings. When he wasn't competing and or playing for his high school, he most frequently competed in the American Junior Golf Association (AJGA) and their tournaments. In 2012, Hardy had a number of notable performance. In the Stonehenge Junior Open, which is an event on the AJGA circuit, Hardy tied for 9th place and in the same year, tied for 4th position in the Exide Technoogies Junior Open, also part of the AJGA. Lastly, in 2012, Hardy capped off the year at the Jones Cup Junior Invitational with final rounds of 69 and 71, which put him in a tie for 2nd place.

Moving into 2013, Hardy began to find his way into more prestigious events. In the AJGA Stonehenge Open, which a year ago, he had finished in a tie for 9th in, Hardy shot rounds of 69, 70, and 63 to seal the victory. In the same year, Hardy qualified for two notable tournaments in the form of the US Amateur Open and the Illinois State Junior Championship. In the US Amateur Open, an event hosted by the United States Golf Association (USGA), Hardy shot out of the gate with an opening round of 65 on a course where par was 70. This opening round earned him the opportunity to the round of 64 and in terms of stroke play (numerical amount of strokes taken) Hardy earned a 7th place finish. In the Illinois State Junior Amateur Championship, an event put on by the Chicago District Golf Association (CDGA), Hardy finished in 2nd place. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 15:26, 23 April 2018 (UTC)

Draft
DRAFT

HEADING

Nick Hardy is a amateur golfer from Northbrook, IL. Hardy is currently playing college golf for the University of Illinois in Urbana Champaign mens golf team who has also played at the professional level in the Us Open and in the John Deere Classic. In addition, Hardy has won a number of Junior championships both in the state of Illinois and nationally. He has a major list of notable amateur wins spanning from his high school career at Glenbrook North to Illinois State amateur championship. The 22 year old Hardy is currently helping his Fighting Illini golf team to a national championship but is expected to go on the PGA Tour next season.

HIGH SCHOOL AND JUNIOR AMATEUR CAREER

In high school, Hardy had a number of good showings. When he wasn't competing and or playing for his high school, he most frequently competed in the American Junior Golf Association (AJGA) and their tournaments. In 2012, Hardy had a number of notable performance. In the Stonehenge Junior Open, which is an event on the AJGA circuit, Hardy tied for 9th place and in the same year, tied for 4th position in the Exide Technoogies Junior Open, also part of the AJGA. Lastly, in 2012, Hardy capped off the year at the Jones Cup Junior Invitational with final rounds of 69 and 71, which put him in a tie for 2nd place.

Moving into 2013, Hardy began to find his way into more prestigious events. In the AJGA Stonehenge Open, which a year ago, he had finished in a tie for 9th in, Hardy shot rounds of 69, 70, and 63 to seal the victory. In the same year, Hardy qualified for two notable tournaments in the form of the US Amateur Open and the Illinois State Junior Championship. In the US Amateur Open, an event hosted by the United States Golf Association (USGA), Hardy shot out of the gate with an opening round of 65 on a course where par was 70. This opening round earned him the opportunity to the round of 64 and in terms of stroke play (numerical amount of strokes taken). Hardy earned a 7th place finish in the Illinois State Junior Amateur Championship, an event put on by the Chicago District Golf Association (CDGA). Hardy would compete once again in this tournament in 2016 and win it. In addition to simply winning the tournament, Hardy also set some records. When Hardy won the Illinois State Junior Amateur Championship, he had shot the lowest winning score in the history of the tournament. At St. Charles Country Club where par for a four round tournament is 288, Hardy shot 260 or -28, the lowest winning score and total ever recorded in the championships history

Hardy Graduated high school in the Glenbrook North class of 2014. Hardy had a number of various rankings at the time. In the class of 2014, Hardy was considered the 14th best golfer in the nation. At the state level, Hardy found himself ranked the number two junior amateur golfer in Illinois by the AJGA in which Hardy had played many events for.

Freshman Year

Nick Hardy found himself playing as a freshman for the Fighting Illini during the 2014-15 season. By the time his freshman year of golf was over, Hardy had recorded a season stroke average of 72.9 and racked up five top 10 finishes in the season. Hardy earned some conference honors and awards as well. In his freshman year, Hardy won the Big 10 freshman of the year award, was considered a first team All Big 10 player his freshman year, and was a co-champion at the Big 10 conference tournament.

Summer '15 and US Open

Over the summer, Hardy tried to qualify for the US Open. In order for a junior amateur such as Hardy to enter the qualifying rounds, he first must have a mens handicap greater than or equal to 1.4, which he did. In order to make it into the Open, Hardy first had to get through the local qualifying round by finishing high enough for him to qualify to the second round better known as the sectional qualifier, a 36 hole tournament. Hardy reached the second round which was to be held at Springfield Country Club in Springfield, Ohio, and in order for him to make it to the Open, he had to finish in the top four. During the round, Hardy struggled off the tee with the driver but his putting kept him in the game. After he had completed his first 18 holes, he was -2 with a score of 68 and he would remain at -2 going into his final 14 holes. Over the course of the final 14 holes Hardy shot -4 and ended with a streak of 7 pars. Hardy's scorecard showed a final round of 134 or -6 for the course, putting him in a tie for third place and therefore recieved a birth in the 2015 US Open at Chambers Bay.

The 2015 US Open

At the US Open held in Chambers Bay in Washington state, Hardy found himself playing against the best in the country. Par for the course was 70 and the course was very dry, and this meant that the greens had more of a hard condition to them and that the ball would roll farther with less power. This would prove to be a key factor in Hardy's performance. By the time of the second round, Hardy was located near the cut line by the time his round was coming to a close but safe enough for him to advance. On his 36th hole of the tournament, Hardy famously missed a putt for par and made a bogey. This missed putt allowed fellow competitors such as Sergio Garcia, Webb Simpson, and Angel Cabrera (all of whom are now major champions) to slip in and make the cut for the week. Because of this put, Hardys finishing position was lessened but none the less, he had made the cut. On the final day of the tournament, Hardy shot a round of 68 or -2 for the day and finished the tournament +10 and finished in 52nd position.

High School and Junior Amateur Career
In high school, Hardy had a number of good showings. When he wasn't competing and or playing for his high school, he most frequently competed in the American Junior Golf Association (AJGA) and their tournaments. In 2012, Hardy had a number of notable performance. In the Stonehenge Junior Open, which is an event on the AJGA circuit, Hardy tied for 9th place and in the same year, tied for 4th position in the Exide Technoogies Junior Open, also part of the AJGA. Lastly, in 2012, Hardy capped off the year at the Jones Cup Junior Invitational with final rounds of 69 and 71, which put him in a tie for 2nd place.

Moving into 2013, Hardy began to find his way into more prestigious events. In the AJGA Stonehenge Open, which a year ago, he had finished in a tie for 9th in, Hardy shot rounds of 69, 70, and 63 to seal the victory. In the same year, Hardy qualified for two notable tournaments in the form of the US Amateur Open and the Illinois State Junior Championship. In the US Amateur Open, an event hosted by the United States Golf Association (USGA), Hardy shot out of the gate with an opening round of 65 on a course where par was 70. This opening round earned him the opportunity to the round of 64 and in terms of stroke play (numerical amount of strokes taken). Hardy earned a 7th place finish in the Illinois State Junior Amateur Championship, an event put on by the Chicago District Golf Association (CDGA).

Hardy Graduated high school in the Glenbrook North class of 2014. Hardy had a number of various rankings at the time. In the class of 2014, Hardy was considered the 14th best golfer in the nation. At the state level, Hardy found himself ranked the number two junior amateur golfer in Illinois by the AJGA in which Hardy had played many events for. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.13.14.229 (talk) 23:09, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

Freshman Year
Nick Hardy found himself playing as a freshman for the Fighting Illini during the 2014-15 season. By the time his freshman year of golf was over, Hardy had recorded a season stroke average of 72.9 and racked up five top 10 finishes in the season. Hardy earned some conference honors and awards as well. In his freshman year, Hardy won the Big 10 freshman of the year award, was considered a first team All Big 10 player his freshman year, and was a co-champion at the Big 10 conference tournament.

Summer '15 and US Open
Over the summer, Hardy tried to qualify for the US Open. In order for a junior amateur such as Hardy to enter the qualifying rounds, he first must have a mens handicap greater than or equal to 1.4, which he did. In order to make it into the Open, Hardy first had to get through the local qualifying round by finishing high enough for him to qualify to the second round better known as the sectional qualifier, a 36 hole tournament. Hardy reached the second round which was to be held at Springfield Country Club in Springfield, Ohio, and in order for him to make it to the Open, he had to finish in the top four. During the round, Hardy struggled off the tee with the driver but his putting kept him in the game. After he had completed his first 18 holes, he was -2 with a score of 68 and he would remain at -2 going into his final 14 holes. Over the course of the final 14 holes Hardy shot -4 and ended with a streak of 7 pars. Hardy's scorecard showed a final round of 134 or -6 for the course, putting him in a tie for third place and therefore recieved a birth in the 2015 US Open at Chambers Bay.

At the US Open held in Chambers Bay in Washington state, Hardy found himself playing against the best in the country. Par for the course was 70 and the course was very dry, and this meant that the greens had more of a hard condition to them and that the ball would roll farther with less power. This would prove to be a key factor in Hardy's performance. By the time of the second round, Hardy was located near the cut line by the time his round was coming to a close but safe enough for him to advance. On his 36th hole of the tournament, Hardy famously missed a putt for par and made a bogey. This missed putt allowed fellow competitors such as Sergio Garcia, Webb Simpson, and Angel Cabrera (all of whom are now major champions) to slip in and make the cut for the week. Because of this put, Hardys finishing position was lessened but none the less, he had made the cut. On the final day of the tournament, Hardy shot a round of 68 or -2 for the day and finished the tournament +10 and finished in 52nd position. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.13.14.229 (talk) 23:11, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

Sophmore Year of college
Now a sophomore, and having competed in the US Open, expectations were high for Hardy and the Illinois golf team. Over the course of the fall golf season for Illinois, Hardy recorder a stroke average of 71.66 which was the second best on the team at that time. During the fall season, Hardy had 8 out of 12 rounds in which he shot under and or even par. In the four concluding tournaments of the regular season, Hardy earned top ten finishes in all of them. When the Big 10 championships came around, Hardy earned a top 20 finish. At the NCAA Championships, Hardy individually put himself in position to tie for 36th place. When all was said and done, by the end of the Spring season, Hardy recorded a slightly higher stroke average than when he started which amounted to 72.78. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 15:14, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Junior Year of College
Hardy, now a junior entered the 2016-17 season playing some of his best golf ever. In terms of the fall season, Hardy ended up recording four finishes in which he placed within the top five, and in 6 out of the twelve rounds he played, Hardy shot a score that was under par. In 2017, Hardy received Ben Hogan Award honors for his play at Illinois. In addition to what he accomplished for his school, Hardy was selected to play for team USA at the upcoming Arnold Palmer Cup. During the spring time season, Hardy recorded a total of six top-10 finishes, and among those was a 6th place finish at the Big 10 championships and he would also receive All-Big 10 First Team honors in 2017. Hardy also made history when he competed in the NCAA West Lafayette Regionals and won the event. By winning he became only the fourth regional medalist in the history of the University of Urban Champaign. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 15:31, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Summer 2016
During the summer months of 2016, Hardy once again qualified for the Us Open, this time to be held at Oakmont Golf Club. He qualified for the Open by competing in the same qualifier he finished 3rd in a year ago in Springfield, Ohio and in 2016 Hardy ended up achieving medalist honors at the qualifier thereby letting him advance to the US Open. In addition to qualifying for the US Open, Hardy would once again play in the Illinois state Junior Amateur Championship and this time he would win it. In addition to simply winning the tournament, Hardy also set some records. When Hardy won the Illinois State Junior Amateur Championship, he had shot the lowest winning score in the history of the tournament. At St. Charles Country Club where par for a four round tournament is 288, Hardy shot 260 or -28, the lowest winning score and total ever recorded in the championships history won the Illinois State Amateur Championship by shooting a record low winning score of -28. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 15:39, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Whats Left?
i have made sufficient progress on my articles page and it is fortunately still up. I think now all i should consider doing is adding in his accomplishments such all big ten first team for example. Id also like to see if his performance in the John Deere classic is sufficient enough to include in the articles page. Sources are all accounted for and maybe just one needs to be cited. As of now, my primary focus is on the reflection which will be included in tomorrows final draft of my work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 14:29, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Refelction
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nick_Hardy Username: Pokornym384

When I first saw this unit is thought to myself "oh boy" but now im thinking "this is actually not that bad". I first felt intimidated when i started the unit because of the giant monster that was Wikipedia due to the fact that they are strict about what people post. But in terms of deciding what to add to my article, i knew my strenghts and weaknesses both in my writing and the article i chose. I wanted to write about someone not to famous but t the same time someone who isnt a nobody. My approach to critiquing the article was based on content gaps. My artcile was about Nick Hardy, a golfer and there was little information about hius career in college and on the Amateur circuit. I decided to edit and contribute to his college career as well as his first US Open appearance because college golf is a topic that isnt to small for Wikipedia and needs attention because golf in the NCAA is not as well followed as say basketball or football. When analyzing my contributions, there are a number of differnt things i added to the article that made it a more informative one. The most important contribution was that his US Open career. Not only was the part of the US Open needed, i also gave future readers more perhaps unkonwn knowledge about the tournamnt. You see, most people dont follow or know it but in order to make it to the open, you must first qualify by participating in two qualifiers. I summed up a small part of the process to get to the Open on Hardy' page in 2 to 3 sentences where on the US Open page, it would be a paragraph about simply trying to get into the Open. This opens up another chapter in the readers curiosity. I alsso made sure that i noted who Hardy was competing with and how close he was to them on the leaderboard. For example, when Hardy missed a put which allowed a number of others to make the cut at the US Open, he let in a number iof now major champions. Before i edited it, the previous editor just listed how Hardy did and summarized HIS performance, he did not give a perspective as to how close Hardy was to some of the best in the game. The main goal i wanted to establish in my edits was to give Hardy an golfing identity (is he a good putter, chipper, driver, etc?) Every golfer is known for excelling in one area of the game and i want the reader to come up with their own conclusions as to what the best area of his game is based off my research so then they can visualize it in their minds. Working on Wikipedia was great — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pokornym384 (talk • contribs) 16:39, 7 May 2018 (UTC)