User talk:Pongo 3931

Note of edits to padua college page:

Opening paragraph revisions.

Refers to "this campus alone" without making reference to location, reader cannot know which campus is "this campus". Paragraph now refers to the Mornington campus.

Removed "...the children of" from opening paragraph, Padua's 2000 students are not parents... yet.

Removed the word 'entire' from the sentence "across the entire Mornington Peninsula." The peninsula is a region in its entirety, it does not need to be stated as such.

Reference (http://www.padua.catholic.edu.au/lk1_campuses.html) removed - dead link. I would suggest referencing a current yearbook as it is a permanent reference.

History Revisions

removed the word "small" from "From these small beginnings..." unnecessary.

Sentence " From these beginnings, Padua College has grown to a thriving dual-campus Catholic community on the Mornington Peninsula." changed to " From these beginnings, Padua College grew into a thriving dual-campus Catholic community which extended across the Mornington Peninsula." Sentence changed to ensure consistent tense. 'Mornington Peninsula' reference changed to ensure it was not a repetition of previous statements. Consider revision to ensure compliance with internal policy. Reference now required.