User talk:Potassiumfluoride/sandbox

Peer Review
There's a lot of content. However, the style of writing is too much like a story or an essay. Also, proofread a few more times. For example: "This included subjects including,..." SFPSMC (talk) 03:40, 10 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you for this feedback

Peer Review 2
I know it is just a draft, but breaking up your content with Life, Career, Awards and Honors, etc. might be helpful to the reader and make it less story like. I also was intrigued as why she was asked to step down in the department and would love to know why if that information is available. It may be worth adding if available and interesting. Some word repetitions like the above review stated. You have a lot of great information and have a good sequence. Cmiller02 (talk) 04:58, 11 February 2018 (UTC)
 * These are good ideas, thank you for your feedback.