User talk:Ppiazza17/sandbox

Peer Review
by Stasia Ross  1. Overall, the edits seem to be slightly biased towards one side. This could be just me, but I find that what you are adding is heavily leaning towards the negatives of daylight saving time. I would maybe make one of your edits a positive. 2. All of your edits seem to be sufficient. I feel that they will help improve the articles that you are adding to. 3. The first edit to Traffic Collision seems to be lacking a citation. So, I would just go back and add that citation/source just to make sure that it is more reliable. The rest of the edits seem to have citations that comply with Wikipedia's standards. However, I would think twice about using CNN as a source since they have a reputation for being unreliable. 4. The language of everything seems to be fine. There were a couple of grammatical errors here and there. For example, in the first edit, you wrote "life and can.." The rest of the sentence is fine, but the beginning doesn't seem to make sense. In another edit, you wrote, "Swedish researchers had found out that..." I would get rid of "had" and just leave it to say that "Swedish researchers found out.." 5. Overall, you follow the assignment instructions and format. You have made three edits and included the citation to most of your edits. Again, I would make sure that you add that citation to you first source.

Response
I don't believe all the edits are leading toward the negatives, I am just stating the facts according to what I found in my citation. My research paper was about how daylight saving time can affect us and I wanted to add to these following articles about how daylight saving time can be affecting us. It might seem biased, but I am just simply stating the fact. I have notice my lack of citation was due to because I did not bring my citation from the sources down to the statement I wants to add in my article. The article I am editing also had a CNN source, so I believed that it was reliable as it was not flagged to be an invalid source. But I will look into it and check with the professor to see what she thinks. I do have a tend to not have the best grammars in my sentences, so thank you for showing me the examples of what I should fix. Again, thank you Stasia for your suggestions and I will make those edits.