User talk:Ppmoi/sandbox

Peer Feedback: The usage of statistics involved is highly valuable when on the topic of resources and spending, and it is great how many important statistics are referenced throughout the article. Throughout the draft you mention what aspects of the topic you have chosen will be expanded upon in the final article, which allows me to see that you already have a plan on further pieces of information you will include, and what further statistics you will use. This is effective in fulfilling the role of a relatively good draft which you have done to an extent. Although the information is there, it could perhaps be more visually pleasing if there were subheadings and images involved, as currently it is mostly chunks of information at a time which may come across as an eyesore to many readers. The use of subheadings and images also allow for the reader to navigate through the article in an effective manner, especially if they may want to read closer on certain aspects or parts of the article. Although this may not be as relevant, the addition of providing a link to the references used would be useful and more convenient for the reader, and the overall presentation of the references section could be improved as it does appear somewhat messy. Leaving a space between each reference used while also providing links for the references would improve this.

peer feedback 2:

positives: improvements: Wikibright14 (talk) 00:51, 1 December 2021 (UTC)
 * good use of referencing throughout.
 * detailed statistics used in article to back up points.
 * concise sentences with specific and relevant knowledge.
 * good context.
 * text is only 500 words - max is 800 for draft whereas real thing the max is 1000.
 * There's some grammatical errors. For example: 'thus we questioning' maybe check this before the final draft.
 * Having the summary then 3 main bodies would neaten the article up and organise it although I assume it isn't finished because of the plan at the end.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Icer_51020#Peer_Feedback — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ppmoi (talk • contribs) 21:03, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

Respon to peer-assesment
- I will correct the grammatical error and typos: That will improve my articles - Put some data and statistics: To justify my arguments - I will add subheadings to give specific pattern for the paragraph

comments I wouldn't use: - 800 words including the reference, I will continue my article instead - — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ppmoi (talk • contribs) 20:02, 6 December 2021 (UTC)