User talk:PreciousAdemola/sandbox

Authors Note
On my Wiki sandbox what I did was I looked at the Wiki page I was assigned and went ahead and added any missing information that I thought needed to be added to the first paragraph. I also went in and added a section that has a brief summary of what the documentary covered and its meaning. I watched the entire documentary so that I could get a proper insight on the matter and went from there. I am still trying to find what the critics have to say about specifically the documentary. While searching, I have only been able to find what critics say about the Black Lives Matter movement but not so much on the documentary.

Peer Review- Samantha
Lead Section
 * intro sentence is clear and concise and states what article will be about all in one sentence
 * in the summary you could add what the phrase "Stay Woke" means
 * context that connects the intro sentence with the summary is clear but the article is missing a body section with specific details about the documentary and additional information about the Black Lives Matter Movement

Article
 * organization is good and easy to follow but still need to add a body section
 * content is missing for body section to make the connection to the lead section. There are still no additional details of the events that lead to the uprising of The Black Lives Matter Movement. Also, need information to connect the "Stay Woke" documentary to how the BLM movement came to be (this will further support what you said in the intro). Add information about how the #blacklivesmatter came to be so popular on social media. It would be helpful to provide more information about the incident of Trayvon Martin and other incidents involving injustice. Add details about police brutality from other sources besides the documentary to get additional points of view.

References
 * Need more references to support the article and give additional points of view. As of right now the reader only gets the point of view from the movie. But, the source you used is well cited in each sentence and the reference is complete. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sshively (talk • contribs) 20:35, 16 April 2018 (UTC)

Lead
I can't believe how much of a stub your article was before you started working on it. I think it was a good idea to just turn the stub into the lead section because it does a nice job summarizing the documentary.

Article
You have a good start. What you have written flows well. Although it seems evident from how you have described the film above, the last two sentences of the summary could be construed as offering an opinion. I think you should elaborate on the other "injustices shown in the film." You could also hyperlink Trayvon Martin, George Zimmerman, and BLM Wikipedia articles.

Leading Section
I like how you incorporated the original paragraph of the article in the lead section but made it more clear. You did a good job of setting up what you were going to talk about in the article in a very clear and concise way.

Article
Your organization of the article as well of the summary is great. I think you could add more about the main people or parts of the movement that the documentary is about in your summary as well as another section on the critical reception of it. I did not see any reflection of bias so you did a great job of staying neutral.