User talk:Prietom

Your submission at Articles for creation
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 * Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! Excirial ( Contact me, Contribs ) 19:47, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

Paul Davis + Partners page
Dear Excirial,

I wonder if you could expand on why my page on Paul Davis + Partners was declined submission. You said that it was written like an advertisement, and I am assuming because you believe I do not had a neutral point of view. Could you please let me know what I should do in order to get this submitted, as I am writing about the company for a friend, and thought that it seemed to be quite similar to other architectural practice wikipedia pages? I looked at the other pages first in order to get an idea of the style of writing.

I appreciate any advice you can give me.

Thanks, Prietom — Preceding unsigned comment added by Prietom (talk • contribs) 15:21, 11 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Hiyas there Prietom,


 * The problem is that the article itself contains a lot of non-neutral wording, also called peacock terms. Also the entirely itself is promotional, since it mainly seems to sum up how great the company is. For example:
 * is a strong international London based architectural practice known for skillful integration (Subjective wording and conclusions)
 * Paul Davis + Partners' approach to sustainability encompasses high quality design and sound environmental principles for the mutual benefit of clients, society and the environment as a whole (More subjective wording, and the line on its own reads like a marketing brochure).
 * Besides this the article needs more reliable sources to verify the content that has been written. In that case, the more reliable sources, the better. For example, have a look at the sourcing of Kelihos botnet, an article i wrote some time ago. Note that this article might actually have an extreme amount of sourcing for its length, but literally everything line can be verified in a reliable source. If you need an example to model your article after, i would always suggest to use an article which is marked as a good article. Good article's are checked before being promoted, thus you can be certain that you are using a decent example. Also, unlike features article's which are the best of the best, Good article's tend to be somewhat smaller and easier to read and dissect.


 * Hope this helps, and with kind regards, Excirial ( Contact me, Contribs ) 17:52, 11 July 2012 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation
 Thank you for your recent submission to Articles for Creation. Your article submission has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. Please view your submission to see the comments left by the reviewer. You are welcome to edit the submission to address the issues raised, and resubmit once you feel they have been resolved.
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 * Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! -- Eclipsed (talk) (COI Declaration) 12:57, 18 July 2012 (UTC)

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Your submission at Articles for creation
 Thank you for your recent submission to Articles for Creation. Your article submission has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. Please view your submission to see the comments left by the reviewer. You are welcome to edit the submission to address the issues raised, and resubmit once you feel they have been resolved.
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 * Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! GregJackP   Boomer!   03:14, 7 August 2012 (UTC)