User talk:Psaltele/sandbox

Other trends that influence the way youth communicate is through hashtags. ( This sentence seems a little awkward, maybe you could say "Another trend that influences the way youth communicates is the usage of hashtags." )Divrath (talk) 15:36, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

The paragraph about the negative effects of social media is really strong. The first and second paragraphs do not have many citations. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Clairehoffman (talk • contribs) 15:28, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"The emergence of social media platforms collided different cultures and their communication methods together, forcing them to realign in order to communicate with ease with other cultures. As different cultures continue to connect through social media platforms, thinking patterns, expression styles and cultural content that influence cultural values continue to blend." These sentences are a little confusing, maybe make it more concise by saying something like, "The emergence of social media platforms fused together different cultures and their communication methods, blending together various cultural thinking patterns and expression styles." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sehar.h (talk • contribs) 15:32, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Make sure to use the correct layout and font. It might also be helpful to use researcher's names or some other distinction because there are so many different research projects mentioned.Megan Osterhaus (talk) 15:35, 28 November 2018 (UTC)Megan Osterhaus

I think you should add more sources to the "adolescents" and "interpersonal relationships" section to support your claims; maybe experimental studies or scientific journals to support/add factual detail. -sehar.h

You might want to rearrange the first section to put the third paragraph first. -Michael S — Preceding unsigned comment added by MichaelSeigel (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Feedback
Hi you have several large issues that need to be addressed. I have tagged many statements that are vague. Wikipedia articles should have specific, factual information. You want to make sure you understand the policy on weasel words and avoid them. You also have a lot of uncited information, which makes me think that you are drawing your own conclusions about work you are reading and adding it in, which is considered original research and not allowed. Everything you add to Wikipedia must be cited. Don't switch to second-person perspective (use of "we"). This will need a lot of work before it's ready to move to mainspace. Are you trying to create a new article or edit an existing one? Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:13, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your quick feedback! I am trying to add to the existing social media wikipedia page. A lot of the content you said was vague and didn't have a citations was actually from the page already. Everything that I contributed should have a citation at the end of it. There might be an instance where a citation might be for 3 or 4 sentences since all the information came from one source. I really appreciate all the comments and will revise my work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Psaltele (talk • contribs) 17:59, 29 November 2018 (UTC)