User talk:Ptweil/sandbox

Where is the text in your sandbox?
Your sources are fine but I don't see any text. Please explain how you are adding to or changing an existing article. Consider starting a new article on a narrower topic. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 14:57, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Almost ready to publish
Dear Mr Weil

Good progress. Sources are fine but I think that the FNs need editing. I am assuming that you are editing existing article? Giving you 15 points so far until we sort out the FN editing. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:24, 20 November 2018 (UTC)

Yes this is going to be inserted into the Article ‘Slavery in Portugal’ under Black Slaves section, which has been empty since 2012. Ptweil (talk) 22:02, 20 November 2018 (UTC)

Need to edit your text
Dear Mr Weil

I see now how your work will improve the existing article. However your text needs a lot of editing. Unclear if you are only discussing slaves INSIDE of Portugal or also Portugese colonies. The estimate of 10% of the population certainly needs more documentation. Hard to believe. Work on the population figures. I think you need to add links to other Wikipedia articles. Bring your text to the Teaching and Learning Commons for help with the prose. 15 points so far. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 13:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)