User talk:Qingran Lei/sandbox

Hi- Aditi here, I made some edits to the sandbox article, just some proofreading and grammatical changes. Adeitykumar (talk) 05:03, 20 May 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review (Mandy Chen)
I realize that this article isn't completed yet, so you guys may be working on these stuff already. There are some terms that should be linked to other wiki pages for more detailed definition, for example the GAPA receptor. Also, I suggest the third paragraph in the discovery section to be in another independent section, since it is not closely related to discovery it seems so far. The synthesis could also be described more in detail, if possible. Other wise the intro and paragraphs look decent and well-condensed, which they should be, so good job!!

Tgb005 (talk) 03:41, 23 May 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review (Chloe)
I think this is still a work in progress since only the discovery of IPTBO section is there, so after adding more sections it should be more balanced. I think the discovery section has some grammar mistakes like unnecessary commas. Also, I think some information and word choice is a little repetitive, so the main point wasn't as clear. I think rephrasing the sentences can go a long way in clarifying points and help in increasing comprehension of the topic.

Chloeschiu (talk) 03:52, 23 May 2019 (UTC)