User talk:Qjc498/sandbox

Savannah’s Assessment of Blair:
One thing that was done well is the structure of the portion that you wrote. Each sentence leads smoothly into the other, and this gives the reader a clue to what is coming. Even the final sentence sums up the points you were speaking about in a concise manner. It is organized and logically laid out.

Another thing that was done well would be this sentence: “Thomas Hoffmann also discusses in his book on new information and technologies that it is because of these new and creative ways of simplifying the Qur'an that the world sees a new wave of "lay" users rather than experts and self proclaimed experts in the field.” I like the information that you present here, and you also add a citation to the end of the sentence so that the reader can find his credibility and research if they wanted. I would assume, from what I know of sources, that this is a good and appropriate source to add to this particular article. Saying that, I feel like there is a lot of great valuable information in this sentence that would really help your section if you expand upon it!

There are a few things that could be improved. At the beginning of your edited section you say, “Mohammed Zakariah has come to the conclusion…” but I do not know who Mohammed Zakariah is. I searched his name in the group Digital Qur’an Sandbox and he is not mentioned there, except in this place (where you mention him), so I assume that others who read this article, that are not familiar with the debate surrounding the Digital Qur’an as I am not; would not know who this is (same idea with Engku Alwi who you also mentioned without citation/explanation). Saying that, maybe you could add a footnote, or explain who he is, because as of right now there is no background information on why I should trust that he has Qur’anic authority to come to any conclusion about the Digital Qur’an. Also, because you do not mention him again aside from this comment, it might improve the article if you could expand upon his credentials and state what he does and why. Just a thought!

One other thing would be your citations. I could not see them until I went into the group Sandbox, so it might help if you also included them in your individual Sandbox as well. Also, your citations [10] and [12] require the reader to log into ProQuest to view the citation. I’m not sure if this is because you copied and pasted a URL in the citation, but I thought it was worth mentioning!

(Side note: I would also encourage you to look over grammar punctuation of your section to support clear sentence structure.)

Preliminary Grade: A

JM's Peer Review
Two comments on what your individual changes do well:

Mentions how the Qur'an as a digital text leads to more distribution of the text using two citations

Mentions how the popularity of the Qur'an as a digital text leads to some issues regarding how to adhere to rituals related to the text

Two comments on what needs improvement:

"Muslim" should be capitalized throughout. "Scholars who are now able to study the book and scientists that see new opportunity arise" is incorrect grammatically and confusing. "Another Journal" is incorrect (journal is not capitalized) and confusing--revise. Your last sentence contains a single "o"--watch your spelling mistakes.

Your edits amount to the minimum for expected contributions to the overall page edits. Expand upon the sections you have been working on if you would like an improved grade. There really is not much here for me to evaluate.

Preliminary grade: C Jaclyn-Michael (talk) 18:35, 8 April 2019 (UTC)