User talk:Qrsx/sandbox

Peer edit by: Nicole Intile-Suggs
For this article Erotic Plasticity they focused on how to fix the previous article instead of adding information to make it better. Not having information makes it harder another reader to understand what they are working on. In the future they have to such for more information and see what's missing from the article then see what they have to add because that is the main idea of the wiki project. Also they mostly gave their opinion/review about the article instead of making it a more informative piece. Due to the lack of information there aren't any sources that would be cited. It was also confusing to find the main leader of the article because there were two names under but both lacked information.

Thank you we are working on the sources part now, and adding the names to the end of each review. 02:46, 28 March 2018 (UTC)JustinRowland (talk)Justin Rowland

Peer Edit Comments: Julia Pickar
It seems as if this group has peer edited themselves, in the fact that they have lacked in the provision of information relating to the article and rather focused on the information which was already provided but just moving around where the information belongs. With the lack of information provided, it was hard for me to see where they intend to go with the revision process and improvement of the article. Maybe the group should provide information on the male erotic plasticity hypothesis (if there is one), rather than having the article which only highlights the female hypothesis. If need be the group could possibly change the articles name to, "Female Erotic Plasticity". Adding the same amount of information from the female hypothesis to the male can improve the quality of the article. See if there is any information on how intersex individuals feel and experience erotic plasticity, maybe provide examples (if there are any?). It was very difficult for me to help this group gain some insight on how to revise their article when they provided no new information. I was unaware of what the concept of erotic plasticity was when looking over the information was given, so as a suggestion I feel as if this group should clearly define and explain information more clearly to make it easier not just for me to understand but other readers who will be reading their edits once it has been published.

Peer edit response: Taylor Mitchell

Julia you have a lot of great comments even though there wasn't much to peer edit. I will for sure look into these things and try to add things accordingly.Qrsx (talk) 02:41, 28 March 2018 (UTC)