User talk:QueenBegonia13/sandbox

Article Draft Feedback
Some revisions needed. Chronophoto (talk) 01:00, 20 February 2018 (UTC) (course instructor)
 * Overall very good!
 * Need a more robust introductory paragraph that explains the filmmaker’s importance.
 * Many of the references need more complete information.
 * Recommend deleting section “Personal Life” and moving information about her teaching to another section.

Article Draft Feedback
- Really good article, I thought adding a quote from Nan Anchas was a really good idea as it showed her character. - You have a lot of good information on her career and her filmography. - I think the first two sentences of the Career paragraph should be reworded differently. I also think you should structure the third quote from Anchas the same way you did as the first since it is a long quote. - You have a lot of great sources! Sunesune123

Student Peer Review
I agree with another editor in saying perhaps the second quote should be its own paragraph as it is more than one sentence. In addition, the very last section before the filmography could be rephrased since it seems a little confusing. Overall, I enjoyed reading about this filmmaker and the sources prove to be strong and independent! Jamiev (talk) 15:53, 26 February 2018 (UTC)