User talk:RBThom/sandbox

I like where you are going with this page. I do have a few suggestions. One is that if you are to include a statement about this "Tamara Mott" I would explains who she is before just stating something that she did. Also, I would probably include a subsection titled Somalis and Secondary Migration because your edit makes it seem like secondary migration only applies to Somalis. I would also expand on internal migration within the European Union and not just the U.S.

Bcstell (talk) 17:42, 26 February 2017 (UTC)Bcstell

The original article as you pointed out in your critique is greatly lacking in citation (there are only four), grammar, and content. Your addition of the example of Somalian migration in the Secondary Migration section is really helpful and I was wondering if you considered adding more examples, maybe from other areas of the world? And I would suggest changing the placement of the examples of internal migration from the lead section to a new collective subsection or a subsection for each of the examples. Also it would be useful to further elaborate on the causes for internal migration such as social, education, employment, economic, housing, and environment (I found these among the causes for internal migration in New Zealand) or in a new section along with urbanization and globalization. Khgsu (talk) 04:39, 27 February 2017 (UTC)

All of your comments are good. I will be implementing some of them, but will not have time to implement all. There are so many examples that could be discussed here. I am trying to start a process of of doing so. RBThom (talk) 16:15, 6 March 2017 (UTC)