User talk:RBrockhaus

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Hello, RBrockhaus, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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This is Ryan Brockhaus and I am writing a peer review for this article. First and foremost, the article had a lot of valuable information regarding the city of Birobidzhan. There were numerous sources, several of which come from academic sources like The University of California Press. As it pertains to the intro, it could have been more fluid and, at first, sounds confusing. It felt odd that the first sentence is used to describe how the city got its name. Instead, I feel that the lead section of the intro should talk about the Jewish and Yiddish connection to the city, since it was originally constructed for Yiddish people. Therefore, I feel that the lead doesn't discuss the most important aspects of the article. Instead, the lead just goes right into the timeline. Despite this, there seems to be a clear structure to the article and the chronology of events in the article are organized well. This article also appears very neutral in coverage and doesn't attempt to sway the reader one way or the other about the effects of communism on the town. As it pertains to the second part of the article, there definitely needs to be more references. Currently, only two references were placed and there is a lot of information covered. There needs to be correct referencing for readers to check. Despite this, I feel the article is very informative and look forward to seeing the finished product. RBrockhaus (talk) 02:49, 16 February 2019 (UTC)