User talk:Rac150/Social stigma of obesity

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--Liliput000 (talk) 14:18, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
 * these are absolutely critical contributions!
 * I wonder really if you want a whole new subsection about Language, Naming, and Identity or something like that, rather than making this a subset of Weight Discrimination?
 * Likewise, I think race also warrants a higher level subsection. And also consider giving a slightly more descriptive heading?
 * the sentence with "inherent adverse judgment" in quotes should have a citation.
 * "Fat activists will also use this latin definition to show stigma in the word "obese" itself, as it places blame on the individual for their state." could also use a citation that references this connection to victim blaming
 * "More comprehensive research is necessary, but it can conclusively be determined that there is at least a subset of fat activists that are in support of reclaiming the term fat." is a sentence that is likely to get cut bc it doesn't have a source and it makes a claim that may be coming from you rather than from a secondary source
 * "The social stigma of obesity interacts with racism in a variety of different ways." as one of your reviewers noted this could be more specific. As well, a citation.
 * Also in the race paragraph, include Anna Mollow's name rather than "one author"? As well, your last sentence of that paragraph citing her work is confusing and should be revised. This part -- " in which violence is excused because fatness is already causing inherent injury, but necessary because the size of a large black person is a threat."
 * Next paragraph could use the active voice - for example, Sabrina Strings ... rather than "in sabrina strings's book..."
 * Consider including "scholar" when you mention Strings and Mollow, for context; as well as Hughes. Even better you could include what type of scholar they are ... Mollow is a disability studies scholar -- and double check what Strings and Hughes might best be described as.