User talk:Rakin21/sandbox

Hi Ryan - This is Anne Hyde with some feedback!

GREAT START HERE, GETTING SOME GOOD PRODUCT ON THE PAGE. YOU NEED TO WORK ON FORMATTING ISSUES SO THAT THE ARTICLE HAS ALL THE WIKIPEDIA PARTS AND IS SET UP SO THAT READERS CAN FIND THE INFORMATION THEY NEED. SO, THINK ABOUT THE LEAD SECTION THAT NEEDS TO INTRODUCE THE PIECE AND HOW YOU NEED TO DIVIDE IT UP INTO SECTIONS WITH TITLES. SPEND SOME TIME LOOKING AT BIOGRAPHICAL ENTRIES AND FOLLOW THOSE FORMATS. THE BODY OF THE ESSAY IS SOLID AND YOU HAVE THE TONE RIGHT. HOWEVER, YOU NEED SOME MORE BACKGROUND INFORMATION SO THAT READERS WHO KNOW NOTHING ABOUT THE TOPIC - SO WHAT ARE JESUITS AND WHY WERE THEY IN NORTH AMERICA, ETC. WHO ARE ABENAKIS? SOME OF THAT YOU CAN GET THROUGH LINKS TO OTHER ARTICLES, BUT YOU DO NEED MORE BASICS. YOU ALSO NEED TO FINISH THE END.

THE OTHER PIECE THAT NEEDS SOME ATTENTION ARE SOME MORE SOURCES. THE SOURCES YOU HAVE ARE REALLY GOOD! SOME OLDER HISTORIES OF NEW ENGLAND AND NEW FRANCE WOULD BE GOOD FOR BACKGROUND MATERIAL. USE THE RESOURCES OF THE OU LIBRARY AND SEE WHAT YOU CAN GET ONLINE. I TYPED IN SEBASTIAN RALE INTO THE THE OU LIBRARY SEARCH BAR AND FOUND A LOT. SOME OF IT IS OLD, BUT POKE AROUND SOME MORE.

WHAT ABOUT IMAGES, LINKS, MAPS?

WHAT TO DO NEXT: FINISH THE ARTICLE AND GET SOME SOURCES. YOU HAVE A GOOD CHUNK DONE, BUT THINK ABOUT HOW TO MAKE THIS MOST USEFUL FOR A BEGINNING RESEARCHER. USE THE LIST OF QUESTION BELOW TO THINK THROUGH HOW TO FINISH UP.

ANNE HYDE

LEAD: Does your lead summarize the entire article by briefly covering all important aspects of the topic? Does it work as an outline for the whole article?

First sentence: does it serve as a definition of the article topic, with the topic itself — be it a person, place, thing, idea or concept — in bold, and a brief description that puts it into context?

BODY: Fact-based, not persuasive writing. The article is a description of the information you can find about a topic, based on good sources.

Did you write in your own words? Check that the article doesn’t contain excessive quotations, or copy any sources, even if you’ve given them credit.

Does the article let the reader decide for themselves? Avoid persuasive language? Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?

Did you proofread? Basic grammar and spelling are correct? Complete sentences? Remove first-person (“I/we”) or second-person (“you”) writing.

Formal tone and simple language? No technical language or jargon? Check that you’ve explained acronyms and jargon in simple English the first time you use them.

Is your formatting consistent with the rest of Wikipedia? No bullet-pointed lists or too many headings in your article.

SOURCES: Is every claim cited to a reliable source?

Are there unsourced statements? Are there enough sources

Are the sources reliable and authoritative. Does each source have citations – footnotes, bibliography, etc.

Good sources include textbooks or academic journals. Don’t cite blog posts.

Afh1858 (talk) 02:13, 8 April 2020 (UTC)