User talk:Ranwei/sandbox

Ran,

I think you have done a very good research. Very organized and good selection of writing topics. You have a lot of good and useful sources. You have even corrected some of the things written by other users.

I think you may just need to add either examples pictures or drawings of some of the terms and for the reader to understand better some of the terms. Also adding a map of the regions that wattle and daub is mainly used would be useful. Try adding some links as well to connect to other wiki pages.

Something to edit: Under Variations in the different technique names, you repeated rad and dab.

Other than this I think you did a Great Job!

Dcorchado (talk) 20:18, 20 November 2017 (UTC)dorcascorchado

Instructor comments
I agree with your peer reviewer: good job. Here are some comments and suggestions for improving the final product:
 * Use WP:Citing sources for repeated citations; "Reference 1" and "Reference 2" will not be stable (i.e., if someone adds another reference before or between them).
 * I'm not clear on how Variations are different from Applications; aren't these all different methods of wattle and daub that could be combined into one section?
 * Based on the first mention of lath and plaster, this seems to be more of a continued evolution of the form than a variation of it. The second mention of lath and plaster in the Variations section seems redundant--particularly when introduced with "As mentioned before"--and probably could be eliminated.

Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 05:59, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

Response
Thank you so much for the comments. I've revised it based on your suggestions. Just one thing to clarify, it's actually not a repetition of "rad and dab", the word "rad" can be changed into "rab", so it's "d" and "b". But thanks for pointing out. The original way was confusing, so I changed that part into "rab (rad) and dab". Ranwei (talk) 22:42, 29 November 2017 (UTC)

Finalizing
In "wattle and daub": lime, limestone, binder, aggregate, close-studding, pierratage, jacal. Other articles to wattle and daub: Linear Pottery culture, Bükk culture. Example of pierrotage construction in Ste. Geneviève, Missouri (two links were added with the image: pierrotage, and Ste. Geneviève, Missouri). Ranwei (talk) 23:22, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Links
 * Image